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I side with Rao’s interpretation, though a writer may find other ways to interpret it. Good work, artist.
>>Trick_Question
Can anything in this world truly be original? After all, there's nothing new under the sun.
Can anything in this world truly be original? After all, there's nothing new under the sun.
Oh, this is cute, well detailed and nicely executed. Colors, lines and shadows are crisp and that’s a sweet expression on filly Twi’s face. Despite the subject matter, which has been extensively mined by the fandom, this one will rank high on my slate.
This could use just a tad more contrast on the pony’s features, I think. I agree that this is a top contender. Well done, Artist!
I actually kind of enjoy this one. The blank contrast of the top half really makes the bones and landscape stand out on the bottom. This is definitely one of the grimmer interpretations of the prompt, but I think it fits in its execution.
>>DuskPhoenix
it looks all digital.
It looks like you accomplished this using traditional media as well
it looks all digital.
She sits upon her subjects, the Mistress of the Sun.
They fight to breathe but she is only having fun.
There’s nothing brightly shining beneath her thunder buns…
Her blubber will not yield to force
Her meals are eleven-course
Fat Horse
Fat Horse...
They fight to breathe but she is only having fun.
There’s nothing brightly shining beneath her thunder buns…
Her blubber will not yield to force
Her meals are eleven-course
Fat Horse
Fat Horse...
Re the caption: The problem with imagining it's a New Yorker cartoon is that now all I can think of when I look at this picture is, "Christ, what an asshole." 😝
>>Trick_Question
To be serious for a moment: This seems perfectly fine to me — keep in mind that "your own work" is going to be interpreted with the standards of the media that you're using for your art. While the Celestia and Twilight and Amethyst pony figurines are all objects made by someone else, the art of photography is in the composition, framing, lighting, etc., of your subject. These are objects that nobody before has placed in these relative orientations to capture photographically. It's the same with this round's other photo of the statue, and my photo of the river: what we're being asked to judge it on is not the subject it shows, but the artistic merit of the photo and the story it tells.
It's also the same with Photoshop-based entries such as the one with Celestia against a show map of Equestria. It uses resources which are individually non-unique, but they are components of an overall work which required assembly, and it's in that assembly where the uniqueness (and artistic merit) lies. It's the difference between ingredients and a cooked meal.
Judging-wise, I think it's fair to factor a piece's overall level of effort (or lack thereof) into your scoring, but there's a pretty clear history of works like this being acceptable. Last round's exception, the disqualified broken-glass piece, was an exception because it used a single existing art piece and applied a simple post-processing transformation (some output levels manipulation) that didn't seem to rise to the level of independent artistic effort. Taking a photograph of something, regardless of your opinions of the result, is definitely artistic effort.
To be serious for a moment: This seems perfectly fine to me — keep in mind that "your own work" is going to be interpreted with the standards of the media that you're using for your art. While the Celestia and Twilight and Amethyst pony figurines are all objects made by someone else, the art of photography is in the composition, framing, lighting, etc., of your subject. These are objects that nobody before has placed in these relative orientations to capture photographically. It's the same with this round's other photo of the statue, and my photo of the river: what we're being asked to judge it on is not the subject it shows, but the artistic merit of the photo and the story it tells.
It's also the same with Photoshop-based entries such as the one with Celestia against a show map of Equestria. It uses resources which are individually non-unique, but they are components of an overall work which required assembly, and it's in that assembly where the uniqueness (and artistic merit) lies. It's the difference between ingredients and a cooked meal.
Judging-wise, I think it's fair to factor a piece's overall level of effort (or lack thereof) into your scoring, but there's a pretty clear history of works like this being acceptable. Last round's exception, the disqualified broken-glass piece, was an exception because it used a single existing art piece and applied a simple post-processing transformation (some output levels manipulation) that didn't seem to rise to the level of independent artistic effort. Taking a photograph of something, regardless of your opinions of the result, is definitely artistic effort.
All right folks, I have had An Idea (TM). No ruddy clue when I'll have time to write it this weekend, but color me cautiously not-pessimistic.
Calling dibs on highest not-final spot now. FIGHT ME. :rainbowdetermined:
(EDIT: Arrgh, all the ideas are sucking...)
(EDIT: Arrgh, all the ideas are sucking...)
And since I really should be offering reviews if I'm commenting on art pieces:
I'm really going to have to think about how I'm judging this, because the art here is kind of at right angles to the average submission. But I can say unambiguously that this was worth a grin. It certainly works on a storytelling and humor level, with its commentary on the naming conventions of the show's Twilight-analogues, and its composition tells the story at a glance.
Compositionally ... well, as I said, it works, and that's the biggest thing: the framing here sells the joke. I suppose I would have appreciated seeing, like, some sort of printout (or scribble) of Canterlot castle as a background rather than the ... fabric? ... you've got going on here, but it *is* a nice blue and there's something to be said for how it keeps the piece uncluttered. Still, right now I feel like it's the equivalent of a cartoon with three figures floating against a simple horizon line: there's exactly enough to tell the story and nothing more. As I said last round, yay minimalism I guess? It does a good job with what we get but there are definitely more ambitious pieces in the gallery.
I'm really going to have to think about how I'm judging this, because the art here is kind of at right angles to the average submission. But I can say unambiguously that this was worth a grin. It certainly works on a storytelling and humor level, with its commentary on the naming conventions of the show's Twilight-analogues, and its composition tells the story at a glance.
Compositionally ... well, as I said, it works, and that's the biggest thing: the framing here sells the joke. I suppose I would have appreciated seeing, like, some sort of printout (or scribble) of Canterlot castle as a background rather than the ... fabric? ... you've got going on here, but it *is* a nice blue and there's something to be said for how it keeps the piece uncluttered. Still, right now I feel like it's the equivalent of a cartoon with three figures floating against a simple horizon line: there's exactly enough to tell the story and nothing more. As I said last round, yay minimalism I guess? It does a good job with what we get but there are definitely more ambitious pieces in the gallery.
Actual review:
As >>libertydude notes, this is a piece which deliberately uses white space to enhance the composition. The sparsity definitely works for you here. The composition as a whole is a little more of a hard sell for me, unfortunately.
I'm struggling with a little cognitive dissonance due to your choice of colors. Context suggests you're going for a desert, but the tone of the yellow you're using actually is closer to grass green, which makes it look like gentle rolling hills, in which case I don't understand why these ponies are dead? There's no apparent signs of a struggle, and if they're surrounded by grazing material ...
The background above the horizon, too, is a little odd. You've got this sort of vertical striping effect going on that ... I guess makes it look like they're in the middle of a sandstorm, sort of? But the effect is so subtle that the haze looks quite distant, and I'm losing my sense of place. It feels kind of like the picture stops at the horizon, except it clearly doesn't, and I don't know quite what's going on but I can't say it works for me.
The skeletons are well-rendered for the most part -- the skull on the right especially -- though the hindlegs on the left look awkwardly bipedal. Your simpler coloring style works for you here, with the white "halo" around the figures serving as something of a spotlight on the figures.
As >>libertydude notes, this is a piece which deliberately uses white space to enhance the composition. The sparsity definitely works for you here. The composition as a whole is a little more of a hard sell for me, unfortunately.
I'm struggling with a little cognitive dissonance due to your choice of colors. Context suggests you're going for a desert, but the tone of the yellow you're using actually is closer to grass green, which makes it look like gentle rolling hills, in which case I don't understand why these ponies are dead? There's no apparent signs of a struggle, and if they're surrounded by grazing material ...
The background above the horizon, too, is a little odd. You've got this sort of vertical striping effect going on that ... I guess makes it look like they're in the middle of a sandstorm, sort of? But the effect is so subtle that the haze looks quite distant, and I'm losing my sense of place. It feels kind of like the picture stops at the horizon, except it clearly doesn't, and I don't know quite what's going on but I can't say it works for me.
The skeletons are well-rendered for the most part -- the skull on the right especially -- though the hindlegs on the left look awkwardly bipedal. Your simpler coloring style works for you here, with the white "halo" around the figures serving as something of a spotlight on the figures.
>>Fenton
>>Morning Sun
Sorry if I'm late and bring that up again but I wanted to say something about the art round discussion.
Soo... I kinda cheated here. I didn't know writing without having an art prompt as reference would be considered "cheating". The prompt title alone gave me some ideas and started thinking about a story.
Only afterwards I draw something in, like, 2 hours the night before the deadline, so I could somehow associate my story to it.
(To my defense, it's my first time here at writeoff. Also, I'm not a native English speaker.)
Anyway, you can see it as a symptom on how constraining it is.
I believe that art submission is a good idea, but not the way it is now. For me the art submissions are meant to be an inspiration, a way to give ideas for stories. But if the prompt title alone is sufficient to give an idea, you shouldn't be constrained by the drawing.
Also, I don't care about drawing competition. I mean, yeah sure, why not, it's a cool idea, but I wouldn't mix it with the writing. I'd keep them separate.
Art contest: you focus on drawing, get feedback, get first, whatever, and that's it.
Writing contest: art is just a bonus, an optional source of inspiration.
>>Morning Sun
Sorry if I'm late and bring that up again but I wanted to say something about the art round discussion.
Soo... I kinda cheated here. I didn't know writing without having an art prompt as reference would be considered "cheating". The prompt title alone gave me some ideas and started thinking about a story.
Only afterwards I draw something in, like, 2 hours the night before the deadline, so I could somehow associate my story to it.
(To my defense, it's my first time here at writeoff. Also, I'm not a native English speaker.)
Anyway, you can see it as a symptom on how constraining it is.
I believe that art submission is a good idea, but not the way it is now. For me the art submissions are meant to be an inspiration, a way to give ideas for stories. But if the prompt title alone is sufficient to give an idea, you shouldn't be constrained by the drawing.
Also, I don't care about drawing competition. I mean, yeah sure, why not, it's a cool idea, but I wouldn't mix it with the writing. I'd keep them separate.
Art contest: you focus on drawing, get feedback, get first, whatever, and that's it.
Writing contest: art is just a bonus, an optional source of inspiration.
>>moonwhisper
Welcome to the club! :)
+1
(To my defense, it's my first time here at writeoff. Also, I'm not a native English speaker.)
Welcome to the club! :)
I believe that art submission is a good idea, but not the way it is now. For me the art submissions are meant to be an inspiration, a way to give ideas for stories. But if the prompt title alone is sufficient to give an idea, you shouldn't be constrained by the drawing. Also, I don't care about drawing competition. I mean, yeah sure, why not, it's a cool idea, but I wouldn't mix it with the writing. I'd keep them separate.
+1
As a note on image sourcing: A few rounds back we had someone render their own vector for Pinkie Pie and people assumed it was grabbed from an art site, so I thought I'd spend a few minutes seeing if the Celestia here seemed original. I'm pretty sure it's this existing vector.
(Which is fine! The artistic work here is in the photocollage assembly. This is NOT meant to challenge the entry; I just wanted to make sure my decisions about the artistic merit of the piece weren't based on bad assumptions.)
As others have said, unfortunately, the execution here doesn't seem quite up to communicating the artist's ideas. The "Is she balancing on the mountain?" question distracts from whatever greater point might have been intended about Celestia's caring for ponykind (especially since the physics of her body and mane then become significant questions). Personally, at first I took it as her sleeping on Twilight's map table, but I think there's a different map image for that.
So I won't rank this highly, but thank you for contributing!
(Which is fine! The artistic work here is in the photocollage assembly. This is NOT meant to challenge the entry; I just wanted to make sure my decisions about the artistic merit of the piece weren't based on bad assumptions.)
As others have said, unfortunately, the execution here doesn't seem quite up to communicating the artist's ideas. The "Is she balancing on the mountain?" question distracts from whatever greater point might have been intended about Celestia's caring for ponykind (especially since the physics of her body and mane then become significant questions). Personally, at first I took it as her sleeping on Twilight's map table, but I think there's a different map image for that.
So I won't rank this highly, but thank you for contributing!
I can see this being something Scoots doodled and tacked up on a dream board. Which makes it really sad, despite the ostensibly cheery nature of the piece.
>>horizon
Keep in mind I haven't fully participated in any of the previous art rounds, so I did not know. :pinkiesmile:
I agree with everything you are saying 100%. I was only checking to be certain that I would know if this entry might be disqualified.
Keep in mind I haven't fully participated in any of the previous art rounds, so I did not know. :pinkiesmile:
I agree with everything you are saying 100%. I was only checking to be certain that I would know if this entry might be disqualified.
>>DuskPhoenix
I don't know if Proto pony 350 ever enters these. This looks a lot like his adventure Clyde Tumblr
I don't know if Proto pony 350 ever enters these. This looks a lot like his adventure Clyde Tumblr
>>horizon
I'm sure somewhere on earth there has to be a desert with sand that has a green tint. If not earth then, perhaps Equestria.
I'm sure somewhere on earth there has to be a desert with sand that has a green tint. If not earth then, perhaps Equestria.
Also as horizon said nice job driving the skeletons I could never draw those anywhere near as well.
>>Morning Sun
Don't reference Doctor Who. Whatever you do, don't reference Doctor Who. Reference Doctor Who, and you're dead.
Wait, what?
Don't reference Doctor Who. Whatever you do, don't reference Doctor Who. Reference Doctor Who, and you're dead.
Wait, what?
This is like that one artist on Derby brew whose name I can't remember so I guess that's not a really useful statement.
this looks very new age druggie like I'm pretty sure my friend Trisha could talk about it for five minutes if she wanted to
Given my in person knowledge at Babs con, I am guessing this is Horizon. Off-topic: if you get her eyes and drunk at a convention he'll do drunk terret reading's
WooooAaah man. This 🐜 bug is faaaar out duuude
Celeste yeah after a pot brownie and half a 10 strip
Celeste yeah after a pot brownie and half a 10 strip
>>Rao
Maybe she's like marigold heavenly nostrils and gets stuck looking at her reflection in Ponds sometimes
Maybe she's like marigold heavenly nostrils and gets stuck looking at her reflection in Ponds sometimes
It looks like I'm way more likely to participate in the art rounds of creation and voting, than the writing round because there's a much smaller time commitment for both creation and judging parts of the contest.
>>GroaningGreyAgony
I was going to confess that I didn't think I'd seen any of his films but then realized I was thinking of Woody Allen. I've seen the stage musical version of the producers, and I've seen Young Frankenstein and I've seen blazing saddles.
I was going to confess that I didn't think I'd seen any of his films but then realized I was thinking of Woody Allen. I've seen the stage musical version of the producers, and I've seen Young Frankenstein and I've seen blazing saddles.
I think that I will have to, regretfully, bail out on this month's competition. Just not enough time, or a good enough idea.
I actually really like this one! The colors are very psychedelic, and the grotesqueness of the figures is alluring in its own strange way. The way Celestia's shadow is drawn, however, leaves something to be desired.
I thought that Celestia's back right leg was her tail dock at first. Make of that what you will.
>>Fenton
Rarity rationalizes things, since Spike seems to enjoy doing what he does to help her, as a friend. But it's admittedly creepy that a grown mare with a business empire continues to flirt with a baby dragon. He's probably around fourteen or fifteen years old now, which isn't quite so disturbing.
Anyway, I like Sparity. In part because I like creepy things. <3 I just want Rarity to realize his attentions for what they are and for him to eventually be in a relationship with her, even if it's terribly unrealistic. (Then again, I'm talking about a sapient dressmaking pony and a dragon. Realism is relative.)
Rarity rationalizes things, since Spike seems to enjoy doing what he does to help her, as a friend. But it's admittedly creepy that a grown mare with a business empire continues to flirt with a baby dragon. He's probably around fourteen or fifteen years old now, which isn't quite so disturbing.
Anyway, I like Sparity. In part because I like creepy things. <3 I just want Rarity to realize his attentions for what they are and for him to eventually be in a relationship with her, even if it's terribly unrealistic. (Then again, I'm talking about a sapient dressmaking pony and a dragon. Realism is relative.)
Thank you thank you THANK YOU!!! for finally teaching me how to spell the word "palanquin." I've been trying to figure out how to spell that word since July 19, 2008, when Princess Azula complained to Fire Lord Ozai about how good palanquin bearers are so hard to come by these days.
As for the picture, it's well drawn and funny, but there's nothing here that I find unique or particularly evocative.
As for the picture, it's well drawn and funny, but there's nothing here that I find unique or particularly evocative.
Not that I don't support Amethyst's continued education, but wouldn't the joke work better if it were Sunset Amethyst? Not that you can do much about that...
This looks like how my head feels when I haven't eaten all day and try to walk through Times Square
It's nice, yeah. But I'm not at all having the reaction others are. This really doesn't evoke any emotion in me.
Reminds me of pieces submitted in other rounds with royal guards. I can see this inspiring a lot of stories, but there's not much here that speaks to me.
Hey there, Ember Moon.
The title and prompt make this piece more powerful than any one part of the visuals themselves.
The title and prompt make this piece more powerful than any one part of the visuals themselves.
Since when does adding the caption from a New Yorker cartoon make anything less grimdark?
I remember one that had a dog saying something very near to, "Sorry to wake you, but your son just fucked me up the ass and is now rimming the cat."
Christ, what an asshole, an asshole, and an asshole.
I remember one that had a dog saying something very near to, "Sorry to wake you, but your son just fucked me up the ass and is now rimming the cat."
Christ, what an asshole, an asshole, and an asshole.
Actually that doesn't make sense. It's easy to read in the shade if the sun is unobscured.
wait I'm overthinking again
wait I'm overthinking again
Best of luck everyone else!
EDIT: WOOOOOO
I think this looks quite fantastic and is definitely going near the top of my slate. If I were to nitpick it's that Twi's face looks a little odd (imagine her nostrils are her eyes. Cannot unsee.)
Okay, this has never been relevant before but apparently this one got away from me. How much wiggle room do we have on the word cap?
>>JudgeDeadd
Same - There's 4 pieces that are competing for the top 3 slots for me, way above everything else. This one takes my top, though, for several reasons:
1. Largely open-ended as to what you can write about with it.
2. Very clear prompt connection
3. Art quality is quite good, evoking the show but keeping artist's style in play.
Bonus #4. It's adorably cute.
The other 3 pieces in the running all hit at least 2 of the first 3, but none manages to do all of them.
Same - There's 4 pieces that are competing for the top 3 slots for me, way above everything else. This one takes my top, though, for several reasons:
1. Largely open-ended as to what you can write about with it.
2. Very clear prompt connection
3. Art quality is quite good, evoking the show but keeping artist's style in play.
Bonus #4. It's adorably cute.
The other 3 pieces in the running all hit at least 2 of the first 3, but none manages to do all of them.
I agree with the others that this is nice. Yet, whenever I look at it, the thought in the back of my head is that this is a less bold/imaginative version of "Tall." That being said, Twilight's expression here conveys more of a sense of awe.
While it could be said this is badly drawn, there is still a nice effort in the composition. The background add a nice touch, while we could expect to have nothing or a poor one. Moreover, the way the word 'TALL!' is placed and rotated also add to the composition. It's not something deep or very original but it effectively convey a feeling of height.
My only complain is with the word 'GEE'. We often see words being changed to fit the pony world, creating a pony slang. Maybe I'm wrong but I'm pretty sure gee comes from Jesus and I didn't remember seeing him in the show. Moreover, several expressions use Celestia so it wouldn't be hard to turn Gee in Cee.
Overall, I'm afraid this piece didn't really click for me, mainly because of the style, but I still have to mention the composition. So thank you for sharing and spending time to create your piece.
My only complain is with the word 'GEE'. We often see words being changed to fit the pony world, creating a pony slang. Maybe I'm wrong but I'm pretty sure gee comes from Jesus and I didn't remember seeing him in the show. Moreover, several expressions use Celestia so it wouldn't be hard to turn Gee in Cee.
Overall, I'm afraid this piece didn't really click for me, mainly because of the style, but I still have to mention the composition. So thank you for sharing and spending time to create your piece.
You did a great job of making that sun look really bright.
I think the crystals would have been better if they were either all pretty similar or all different. And it might have looked a bit better if the start of the energy stream had covered a larger area.
On the whole, a pretty good entry.
I think the crystals would have been better if they were either all pretty similar or all different. And it might have looked a bit better if the start of the energy stream had covered a larger area.
On the whole, a pretty good entry.
I still like this scribbly style.
I do wonder if this was done by the same artist who did the scribbly-smoke pictures in the last pony art round. It would be obvious to guess so (and I probably will), but it is different enough that I'm not sure if they're just trying a variation on their style or if this is someone (I'm looking at you, >>GroaningGreyAgony) trying to imitate it. Either way, I think this turned out well. Compared to those other pictures, I think this one benefits from the increased simplicity. I like that the helmet is more detailed, or at least more scribbly, than most of the rest of the picture too.
This will probably be a strong contender for me.
I do wonder if this was done by the same artist who did the scribbly-smoke pictures in the last pony art round. It would be obvious to guess so (and I probably will), but it is different enough that I'm not sure if they're just trying a variation on their style or if this is someone (I'm looking at you, >>GroaningGreyAgony) trying to imitate it. Either way, I think this turned out well. Compared to those other pictures, I think this one benefits from the increased simplicity. I like that the helmet is more detailed, or at least more scribbly, than most of the rest of the picture too.
This will probably be a strong contender for me.
This gets top points for cuteness.
Both ponies look just a bit off to me. It might be that the proportions aren't quite right, but I'm not sure.
Both ponies look just a bit off to me. It might be that the proportions aren't quite right, but I'm not sure.
I will see this in my nightmares.
This is not very aesthetically pleasing, but I have a feeling that it looks exactly the way you want it to look.
>>Fenton
I think using "cee" would have just confused people. I'm fairly certain that I wouldn't have made the connection to Celestia. Besides, "gee" has been used quite a few times in the show. And if you really wanted to ponify "gee," might I suggest "gee"? :p
This is not very aesthetically pleasing, but I have a feeling that it looks exactly the way you want it to look.
>>Fenton
I think using "cee" would have just confused people. I'm fairly certain that I wouldn't have made the connection to Celestia. Besides, "gee" has been used quite a few times in the show. And if you really wanted to ponify "gee," might I suggest "gee"? :p
>>The_Letter_J
I am looking placidly back at you, with a decidedly phlegmatic and enigmatic expression.
I am looking placidly back at you, with a decidedly phlegmatic and enigmatic expression.
Very nice looking. You even used shading and shadows, which puts you way above my artistic abilities. :p
>>Fenton
I think the color is actually a nice touch. After all, according to the prompt, that upside down card is the real focus of the picture.
>>Fenton
I think the color is actually a nice touch. After all, according to the prompt, that upside down card is the real focus of the picture.
If your goal was to make it look like she's protectively curled around Equestria, you shouldn't have left so much of it outside of her grasp. Unless you're trying to say that she only cares about Canterlot, or something. It really does look more like she's just flying over Equestria, except that her wings are folded in.
>>horizon
As it happens, one of my first thoughts was that this might have been better if it was a picture of Celestia lying on that table.
>>horizon
Personally, at first I took it as her sleeping on Twilight's map table, but I think there's a different map image for that.
As it happens, one of my first thoughts was that this might have been better if it was a picture of Celestia lying on that table.
Even taking perspective into account, those trees in the background seem pretty small. I guess that's why Rarity isn't just sitting underneath one of them.
I really can't think of much else to say about this one. You definitely did a good job of drawing though.
And I guess you get bonus points for not using Celestia or flying pegasi. :p
>>Trick_Question
Plus her magic is probably giving off some light. joins the overthinking
I really can't think of much else to say about this one. You definitely did a good job of drawing though.
And I guess you get bonus points for not using Celestia or flying pegasi. :p
>>Trick_Question
Plus her magic is probably giving off some light. joins the overthinking
That's actually a pretty good drawing of Celestia. If you had put the same amount of skill and effort into adding a background, this would probably be a really good picture.
Well someone around here certainly knows how to art.
I think we all know that this will medal.
I think we all know that this will medal.
I think I might have preferred if there was a bit more variety in the shades of gray here. But I that's probably just nitpicking. I'm sure this will do very well.
I like that the pony's identity is ambiguous. My first thought was Fluttershy, but I think an author could justify just about any pegasus they want.
I like that the pony's identity is ambiguous. My first thought was Fluttershy, but I think an author could justify just about any pegasus they want.
I like the idea here, but I don't think it turned out quite well enough. If the entire thing looked like Rainbow does, it might have been a pretty great picture. I can see some clouds when I squint though.
I'm not getting much out of this picture, but I have to give you some points for using an unusual medium.
If only the Amethyst figurine wasn't so much larger than Twilight and Celestia. But I suppose there's not much you can do about that.
And this got a good laugh out of me, which I'm sure was the point.
And this got a good laugh out of me, which I'm sure was the point.
This looks really good, especially considering that you appear to have done it all with colored pencils.
That glitter is going to get all over everything and never go away.
I'm not really sure what's going on along the edges where the mane seems to just stop, but that's a minor nitpick for a great piece.
I'm not really sure what's going on along the edges where the mane seems to just stop, but that's a minor nitpick for a great piece.
0/10 that cutie mark should be an interrobang instead.
But jokes aside, this looks decent enough, and it got a smile out of me.
And I feel like those poles weren't made for ponies to hold.
But jokes aside, this looks decent enough, and it got a smile out of me.
And I feel like those poles weren't made for ponies to hold.
I wasn't a fan of this piece at first, but it ended up being the only one that inspired me to do any writing. Unfortunately, I'm not gonna be able to finish my story—I'm only 800 words in, barely halfway through my first of three scenes, and I need to go to bed now so I can get up early for jury duty.
That said, here's the first paragraph of what would have been (IMO) a pretty good piece about a power-hungry filly trying to divine her greatness:
Thanks for the picture, artist. Sorry I couldn't do it justice.
That said, here's the first paragraph of what would have been (IMO) a pretty good piece about a power-hungry filly trying to divine her greatness:
Three weeks. Three weeks since I first saw the filly, prideful and doomed, trot down the path that runs in front of my shop. As she passed, she spared my tinted windows a glance. She probably spent days practicing that eyes lidded, lips pursed straight, nonchalant look. Really, she just looked like a walking slice of constipated bacon.
Thanks for the picture, artist. Sorry I couldn't do it justice.
This might have worked better in an original fiction round. It just seems too not-pony for a pony round to me.
You did use the empty sky very effectively though.
You did use the empty sky very effectively though.
>>Morning Sun
>>Super_Trampoline
>>The_Letter_J
Actually I'm just the sort of heathen to hope against hope that we get 1+ Doctor Whooves/Weeping Angel type things out of this pic. (I've considered it myself but I can't think of how to write it.)
>>Super_Trampoline
>>The_Letter_J
Actually I'm just the sort of heathen to hope against hope that we get 1+ Doctor Whooves/Weeping Angel type things out of this pic. (I've considered it myself but I can't think of how to write it.)
This is the third art round in a row with at least one picture containing a skeleton or other dead body in it. I hope this tradition continues in the future.
The art here seems fairly simple, but is quite effective. And the joke in the caption was amusing.
The art here seems fairly simple, but is quite effective. And the joke in the caption was amusing.
All right folks, I have caught The Fire(TM) and it looks like I've got a story incoming after all.
At this rate I'll almost certainly be fighting for a spot in the bottom five, but YEEEAAAHHH BOOYYEEEEE
At this rate I'll almost certainly be fighting for a spot in the bottom five, but YEEEAAAHHH BOOYYEEEEE
>>CoffeeMinion
In sharp contrast, my story is on fire, but I give up and am submitting it anyway.
In sharp contrast, my story is on fire, but I give up and am submitting it anyway.
And slides in with 4 hours remaining after being way too distracted by epic melodrama of Monochromatic and Albinocorn...
>>The_Letter_J
I thought that it was a cloak, which gave me a kinda fortune-teller or shamanistic vibe.
In any case, this is a very beautiful piece. The stars in her mane look pretty but don't detract from the power in her eyes. I can't stop looking at it haha
I thought that it was a cloak, which gave me a kinda fortune-teller or shamanistic vibe.
In any case, this is a very beautiful piece. The stars in her mane look pretty but don't detract from the power in her eyes. I can't stop looking at it haha
I got one in last night. Leaving for work so I can't do an editing pass. Good luck, all!
I've been quiet during this round (as opposed to my usual regimen of relentless shitposting), but don't worry, I managed to squeeze something in under the deadline.
Also, since I seem to recall a general complaint about a lack of child death in these writeoffs, I included a scene where Babs Seed falls on a hand grenade to save Coco Pommel's life. Also spike gets poisoned again, but it's just food poisoning, so the worst that happens is he
oh, looks like I got some shitposting in after all.
Also, since I seem to recall a general complaint about a lack of child death in these writeoffs, I included a scene where Babs Seed falls on a hand grenade to save Coco Pommel's life. Also spike gets poisoned again, but it's just food poisoning, so the worst that happens is he
oh, looks like I got some shitposting in after all.
FIRST REVIEW OF THE ROUND, SUCKERS
>>Dubs_Rewatcher
this was nice but feels incomplete
I really liked the first few paragraphs, how they were from the perspective of the fortune teller observing our main character and her habits. It hooked my attention.
when Sunset finally does enter, it felt like it was going too slow for me. she's too coy about this, and Madam has to drag it out of her. I want them to hurry up. I think I would've liked more of the private commentary like in the opening, so even when I know where this is going there's still some interesting things to learn along the way, stretch out the tension.
>>Dubs_Rewatcher
I really liked the first few paragraphs, how they were from the perspective of the fortune teller observing our main character and her habits. It hooked my attention.
when Sunset finally does enter, it felt like it was going too slow for me. she's too coy about this, and Madam has to drag it out of her. I want them to hurry up. I think I would've liked more of the private commentary like in the opening, so even when I know where this is going there's still some interesting things to learn along the way, stretch out the tension.
Wasn't able to expand on my idea enough to get it submitted. :raritydespair: However, I loved the idea I had so I will be posting it on fimfiction despite it not being able to make the round. I guess this gives me some more time to edit now haha :twilightsheepish:
Well, didn't quite hit the deadline. Stupid bottom tier Maslow needs taking up my valuable time. As penance, I shall review the ever loving hell out of everything.
I did crank out nearly 2000 terrible words of Scoot-Dash sisterly sweetness though. So, small miracles. Also a fart joke because I'm classy, damn it.
I did crank out nearly 2000 terrible words of Scoot-Dash sisterly sweetness though. So, small miracles. Also a fart joke because I'm classy, damn it.
"I love deadlines. I love the wooshing noise they make as they go by!" --Douglas Adams
Why do I only ever start writing an entry for these things like 6 hours before the final deadline? I mean, I'm still relatively happy with what I got done, but I definitely felt rushed on the end, and certainly didn't get an edit pass.
Seriously, Muse, why can't you friggin' show up like the day BEFORE the deadline, instead of the night-of? :-P
This was my choice for the entry that I didn't finish, just in case the artist is curious. I was moved to write something attempting to link the colorful surface and the depressing undertone to a final, happy ending. Which I made decent progress on, and had I started it a day earlier I'd have finished with time to spare. But, alas.