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Under the Sun · FiM Short Story ·
Organised by RogerDodger
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Her Eye Forever Gazes Down
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#1 · 2
· · >>horizon >>GroaningGreyAgony
I actually kind of enjoy this one. The blank contrast of the top half really makes the bones and landscape stand out on the bottom. This is definitely one of the grimmer interpretations of the prompt, but I think it fits in its execution.
#2 · 5
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Re the caption: The problem with imagining it's a New Yorker cartoon is that now all I can think of when I look at this picture is, "Christ, what an asshole." 😝
#3 · 2
· · >>Super_Trampoline >>GroaningGreyAgony
Actual review:

As >>libertydude notes, this is a piece which deliberately uses white space to enhance the composition. The sparsity definitely works for you here. The composition as a whole is a little more of a hard sell for me, unfortunately.

I'm struggling with a little cognitive dissonance due to your choice of colors. Context suggests you're going for a desert, but the tone of the yellow you're using actually is closer to grass green, which makes it look like gentle rolling hills, in which case I don't understand why these ponies are dead? There's no apparent signs of a struggle, and if they're surrounded by grazing material ...

The background above the horizon, too, is a little odd. You've got this sort of vertical striping effect going on that ... I guess makes it look like they're in the middle of a sandstorm, sort of? But the effect is so subtle that the haze looks quite distant, and I'm losing my sense of place. It feels kind of like the picture stops at the horizon, except it clearly doesn't, and I don't know quite what's going on but I can't say it works for me.

The skeletons are well-rendered for the most part -- the skull on the right especially -- though the hindlegs on the left look awkwardly bipedal. Your simpler coloring style works for you here, with the white "halo" around the figures serving as something of a spotlight on the figures.
#4 · 1
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>>horizon
I'm sure somewhere on earth there has to be a desert with sand that has a green tint. If not earth then, perhaps Equestria.
#5 · 1
· · >>GroaningGreyAgony
Also as horizon said nice job driving the skeletons I could never draw those anywhere near as well.
#6 · 1
· · >>GroaningGreyAgony
Since when does adding the caption from a New Yorker cartoon make anything less grimdark?

I remember one that had a dog saying something very near to, "Sorry to wake you, but your son just fucked me up the ass and is now rimming the cat."

Christ, what an asshole, an asshole, and an asshole.
#7 · 3
· · >>GroaningGreyAgony
This is the third art round in a row with at least one picture containing a skeleton or other dead body in it. I hope this tradition continues in the future.

The art here seems fairly simple, but is quite effective. And the joke in the caption was amusing.
#8 ·
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>>libertydude, >>horizon, >>Super_Trampoline, >>Trick_Question, >>The_Letter_J

Her Eye Forever Gazes Down

Thanks for the mostly positive comments! This was my “C” idea for this round and was crudely polished on the last day, with most of my effort going to finishing Palanquin. I scanned the pencil sketch to Photoshop, and as I played with the contrast, I discovered the vertical stripes that were introduced by the texture of the paper I’d used and decided I liked the effect. I colorized the picture, aiming for a desert efffect, but did err a bit on the green side.

I intended a similarity of the background to the final illustration in The Little Prince, and at least one other person seems to have caught it.

If you squint a bit, this can be thought of as a distant ‘sequel’ to No More Fires From Here.