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Exposure to Syeekoh has had previous cases of loss of virginity. ~Deepthroat
>>Orbiting_kettle
>>ChappedPenguinLips
>>FanOfMostEverything
>>Not_Worthy2
>>Monokeras
>>Xepher
>>Trick_Question
>>georg
>>Not_A_Hat
>>CoffeeMinion
>>JudgeDeadd
>>AndrewRogue
>>Posh
Thank you all for commenting on my story! It's much appreciated!
Now, retrospective on Abhorrent Amalgamation!
So, Duo Cartoonist released their The Moon Rises animation and I pretty much fell in love with it. I also wanted to experiment with my writing.
So I wrote a dimonologue between Luna and Nightmare, which people seemed to appreciate.
I wanted to start it off with Luna and Nightmare having distinctive voices which eventually began to blend together at the end, so for Luna, I chose a more technical approach and for the Nightmare I went with a far more poetic patter, which kind of swapped at the end. To sort of accentuate the grandiosity as well as make the alliteration work, I chose purposefully obscure words like pulchritude and utilized alternate definitions, like using incubus as a synonym for nightmare(guys seriously come on I don't think anyone's writing about sex demons in a pony writeoff).
I have to say I'm mostly pleased with the result and the reception, although in hindsight I probably wouldn't have cribbed a line from Genesis again―especially not from the King James Bible. There probably was a far more subtle way to invoke religious dog-whistling, like how I used the phrase "Accept me into your heart".
The give and take between the two, especially mid-sentence, was an absolute joy to write. One issue I'm having now is that I barely managed to breach 400 words and now have no idea how to expand it.
You know, it's kind of funny because I had a dream that I got a silver medal and was pretty pumped. Then I woke up, and when I went to freshen up I thought in my head "there's no way I got second place. I probably got... sixth." And to my surprise that was right on the nose!
Once again, thanks to everyone who read and commented on Abhorrent Amalgamation. I appreciate it!
>>ChappedPenguinLips
>>FanOfMostEverything
>>Not_Worthy2
>>Monokeras
>>Xepher
>>Trick_Question
>>georg
>>Not_A_Hat
>>CoffeeMinion
>>JudgeDeadd
>>AndrewRogue
>>Posh
Thank you all for commenting on my story! It's much appreciated!
Now, retrospective on Abhorrent Amalgamation!
So, Duo Cartoonist released their The Moon Rises animation and I pretty much fell in love with it. I also wanted to experiment with my writing.
So I wrote a dimonologue between Luna and Nightmare, which people seemed to appreciate.
I wanted to start it off with Luna and Nightmare having distinctive voices which eventually began to blend together at the end, so for Luna, I chose a more technical approach and for the Nightmare I went with a far more poetic patter, which kind of swapped at the end. To sort of accentuate the grandiosity as well as make the alliteration work, I chose purposefully obscure words like pulchritude and utilized alternate definitions, like using incubus as a synonym for nightmare(guys seriously come on I don't think anyone's writing about sex demons in a pony writeoff).
I have to say I'm mostly pleased with the result and the reception, although in hindsight I probably wouldn't have cribbed a line from Genesis again―especially not from the King James Bible. There probably was a far more subtle way to invoke religious dog-whistling, like how I used the phrase "Accept me into your heart".
The give and take between the two, especially mid-sentence, was an absolute joy to write. One issue I'm having now is that I barely managed to breach 400 words and now have no idea how to expand it.
You know, it's kind of funny because I had a dream that I got a silver medal and was pretty pumped. Then I woke up, and when I went to freshen up I thought in my head "there's no way I got second place. I probably got... sixth." And to my surprise that was right on the nose!
Once again, thanks to everyone who read and commented on Abhorrent Amalgamation. I appreciate it!
>>The_Letter_J
Oh, hush.
>>Posh
Fair point, although I intended
If that many people were misled by my choice of wording, I suppose it's something to look into, but I personally think the intended meaning combined with the alliterative appeal is absolutely sublime, so I'm loath to change it.
Oh, hush.
>>Posh
Fair point, although I intended
Synthesizing with the sticky sluice of the incubusto be synonymous with
entangling my essence with nightmares.
If that many people were misled by my choice of wording, I suppose it's something to look into, but I personally think the intended meaning combined with the alliterative appeal is absolutely sublime, so I'm loath to change it.
>>GroaningGreyAgony
I think you're missing the protagonist's transfiguration by outside forces is actually a political allegory representing how many people feel like the world has changed from under their feet, ironically due to a frog.
I think you're missing the protagonist's transfiguration by outside forces is actually a political allegory representing how many people feel like the world has changed from under their feet, ironically due to a frog.
>>CoffeeMinion
My impression about the prophecy is that it's incredibly vague, meaning that the end of equestria doesn't have to necessarily be a bad thing.
And my thoughts on why Twilight was mad was that Luna and Celestia thought that the prophecy meant that Equestria ending would be a bad thing, so they prepared Twilight for the worst. So she decided to go against that and turn Equestria into a better place―unwittingly fulfilling the prophecy by ending 'Equestria' as a pony-centered society and turning it into a far more integrated one.
My impression about the prophecy is that it's incredibly vague, meaning that the end of equestria doesn't have to necessarily be a bad thing.
And my thoughts on why Twilight was mad was that Luna and Celestia thought that the prophecy meant that Equestria ending would be a bad thing, so they prepared Twilight for the worst. So she decided to go against that and turn Equestria into a better place―unwittingly fulfilling the prophecy by ending 'Equestria' as a pony-centered society and turning it into a far more integrated one.