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The Darkest Hour · FiM Short Story ·
Organised by RogerDodger
Word limit 2000–8000
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#101 · 1
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Victory as of about 35 minutes ago.

Idea one was awesome.

It also took me 2 hours to do 300 words.

Idea 2 was 'Screw this, lets stream of consciousness something' and - well, I don't ever expect to win a Writeoff but, y'know, I think it's passable.
#102 · 1
· · >>Chryssi
So, it’s definitely in, and definitely competing for the last spot.

Sorry Horizon, won’t make it to the finals this time. No dice. :/
#103 · 2
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In with a whole ten minutes to spare!

I can't fix the ending probably, but I can give it an edit pass! :D
#104 · 3
· · >>Monokeras
Oh god it’s 1:13am.

Anyway, mine’s in as of half an hour ago. I edited a few bits here and there and did some basic proofreading in the time left.

>>Monokeras Considering that I’m entering for the first time ever, I’d say I’m competing for that as well.
#105 · 1
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>>Chryssi
Welcome to a bigger world Chrissy! Now put on your armour, you will need it! :P
#106 · 2
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Well, I guess I'd make better use of my time by reviewing some stuff instead of beating myself up over missing the deadline. I'm rather new at this whole "reviewing" business though, so maybe take what I have to say with a grain of salt.

That said, I've already mentioned in one of my FimFiction blogs that I'm correcting last semester's mistake by being a student first and brony second. The amount of time I'll be able to dedicate to Writeoff is entirely dependent on how merciful my professors are (or more likely, aren't).
#107 · 8
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Luna damn it. This is like the one week when I just can't afford the time to binge on Writeoff fics, and reading this comment thread is getting me way too excited about digging into this round's entries. Everyone's really enjoying the things they're reading (!), and apparently there's a Finnegans Wake riff (!) and several pieces of pony SF (!) and two mysteries (!!) and a Time Enough For Love homage (!!!) and just what.

WHERE IS MY READING TIME.

D:
#108 · 6
· · >>Morning Sun
… wow, I think that might just be a new record. A scoche under 15 hours from round start to 1 review for each story.

Great job, everyone!
#109 · 1
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>>horizon
I think it helps this round we seem to have a combination of fewer entries from generally higher reviewing/commenting authors, so that's definitely beneficial.
#110 · 3
· · >>horizon >>FanOfMostEverything >>The_Letter_J
I only have eight stories left to review and I've to say I'm really liking this round. Even with the stories I didn't enjoy as much I can still see a great deal of effort and dedication.

Everyone, pat yourselves in the back and imagine I'm doing it, great job all around.
#111 · 2
· · >>FanOfMostEverything >>Morning Sun
>>Zaid Val'Roa
Yeah, the quality of what I've read has been a heck of a lot more consistent than I'm used to, with a lot of really solid reads.

I'm pretty sure that I'm not going to make finals this round. I'm not even disappointed. :)
#112 · 1
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>>Zaid Val'Roa
>>horizon
I'm going to have to join in the praise here. The average quality of the fics here is notably higher than the norm. And I can't help but feel mine is dragging it down. Well, we'll see what happens come the finals. At least I got plenty of great reading material.
#113 · 5
· · >>horizon
>>horizon
Look at this changeling pretending he didn't write Pinkamena's wake.
#114 · 1
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I'm gonna break rank with the rest of you and say that my entry absolutely deserves to win. By a considerable margin. Because it's the best thing ever written by a human.

Actually it feels pretty middle-of-the-road, given what I've read so far, but.
#115 · 1
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I agree with >>Zaid Val'Roa et al. that The quality of stories this round is really high. But here's the thing: I haven't found any that I actually really like yet. They're all really good, but I'm not enjoying them.
I realize this is completely a matter of taste, and I've only read my initial slate so far. But it's still weird that my reaction to every story so far has been "that was great, but it's not for me."

I blame the prompt.
#116 · 1
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Replacement parts for desktop just came in! Feels good to be using my regular keyboard again. :)

I'll have a few more reviews up in a few minutes.
#117 ·
· · >>Morning Sun >>CoffeeMinion
>>Morning Sun

[img]http://tomorrowlands.org/images/pony/checkmate-suntheists.png[/img]

*c'mon roger give us an img tag already
#118 ·
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>>horizon
That's silly why would I believe in Celestia hahaha only ponies do that and I totally am not a pony especially not an alicorn horse.
#119 · 1
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>>horizon
J'accuse! That's obviously shopped. :-p
#120 ·
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WOO! Finished my slate.

Might end up adding some more later, but at least I've achieved baseline participation.
#121 · 3
· · >>Posh
2 stories left to review EVERYTHING. While we're still in the prelims. Boo. Ya.
#122 · 1
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>>Morning Sun I finished my slate a while ago because I'm hardcore. Right now, I'm going over the ones with the fewest comments/commentators, also because I'm hardcore.
#123 · 3
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And that's all 23 reviewed! Whoo!
#124 · 5
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We're almost at the halfway point and I've run out of stories to review. That means it's time to highlight the ones that haven't gotten a lot of attention.

Cutie Unmarked (#3) and To Be Dazzling (#16) only have three unique comments each.

Room (#13) has only three unique commenters among its four comments.

Eyes of the Night (#17,) Music After Midnight (#20,) and Return (#22) have only four unique comments each.

The House Comes Calling (#10) and Send Only Memories (#12) have only four unique commenters among their five and seven comments respectively.

Now you know, and knowing is half the Writeoff.
#125 ·
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Okay, at this point, there are only six stories left that I haven't read, and a few more that I've read, but haven't reviewed. So if you're the author of one of those stories, I'll get to you soon enough, never fear. Saving them for tomorrow, though.
#126 · 1
· · >>Morning Sun >>CoffeeMinion
Also I had a dream that we were up to four pages of comments and it was a good dream.
#127 ·
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(disclaimer: I haven't watched it so I don't know if the comparison is apt)


Inasmuch as it's a bizarro world parody, but the overall style of comedy differs.
#128 · 2
· · >>CoffeeMinion
>>Posh
The funny part is tho comment counts are lower, average comments/story is much higher.
#129 · 2
· · >>Posh
Done with my slate! Which means I have the weekend to focus on the more difficult and time-consuming part of my self-issued challenge. Yay!
#130 · 1
· · >>Moosetasm
>>Posh
Come, let the dream be reality. :-p

>>Morning Sun
This is like the weirdest/best Writeoff in a lot of ways. Must be the right mix of people and stories!
#131 · 1
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>>CoffeeMinion
Now THAT, Is good timing.
#132 ·
· · >>Bachiavellian
>>Bachiavellian

...this probably came up already, but what was this challenge again?

Also, look! Dreams do come true. :)
#133 ·
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>>Posh
That I'd do a slate of reviews and polish up one of my earlier entries to make up for a general lack of productivity. Details here :>>Bachiavellian.

I think I've decided to move forward with editing Celestiology, AKA my first Writeoff story that I consider an overall success. It's still pretty rough around the edges, and it definitely feels aged, but I think I can spit-shine it a little.
#134 ·
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[b]Top of Georg’s second Round Micro Reviews for the new stories on my slate The Darkest Hour (None of which are How Many Princesses Does It Take, which would have fit the theme so well. Sigh.) Scores are letter grades for Plot, Technical Work, and Characterization mushed together, with an E for stories I find particularly Enjoyable. Ranked by how I like them, not necessarily how perfect they are on the score. (and posted all at once, from top to bottom so they line up on the chat.) Once again, I got a collection of good ones. When I was done reading, I didn’t think any of them had been a waste of my time. It only makes me appreciate our fandom writers more, although I worry that we have driven away some marginal writers with room for great improvement by our leet writezor skillz. :)
#135 · 2
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Well haven't we been a productive bunch this past week.

Only one story has four comments: Return

And there are only two stories left with five comments: To Be Dazzling and Black Swan Song.

It'd be nice if all stories could have at least six comments by the time the prelims end. ^ ^
#136 · 3
· · >>Posh >>CoffeeMinion >>horizon
Hmm. This may be a bit premature, but I still feel like doing it. Mashup time!

Twilight Sparkle Lays the Lamia Egg: After doing the impossible, Twilight has to deal not only with the responsibilities of motherhood, but those that come with a daughter who hungers for horseflesh.

Time Enough to Be Dazzling: No one's entirely sure how the sirens found their way back to Equestria, much less Manehattan, but it's all Vinyl can do to keep things civil between them and Starswirl.

The House Ruins Everything: After Nightmare Moon establishes her harsh but fair regime, Strong Arm, now a valued member of the monarchial bureaucracy, comes to collect on 720 Entertainment's startup loan. Zephyr's sister—who can totally get him out of this, he swears—is nowhere to be found. Pinkie and Maud co-host the farewell party.
#137 · 4
· · >>CoffeeMinion >>horizon
>>FanOfMostEverything
Twilight Sparkle Lays the Lamia Egg: After doing the impossible, Twilight has to deal not only with the responsibilities of motherhood, but those that come with a daughter who hungers for horseflesh.


Isn't that basically the plot to Past Sins?

The House Sends Only Zephyr, Ruining Everything: During a drunken night of gambling in Las Pegasus, Discord puts up both his status as creator-god of the Equestrian pocket universe and Zephyr Breeze as collateral. He loses both. When the call goes out for all matter to be returned, that the universe might create itself anew, Strong Arm declines to end Equestria's existence, and sends Zephyr Breeze instead, considering him entirely expendable. Thus, the universe ends, along with all possibility of new life.

At the Death by Dawn: Blueblood attempts to coerce Starlight Glimmer into sex. She casts a mind control spell on him, has him bludgeon himself to death, then feels really really bad about it.

Music After Sleep's Denotative Embrace: A frustrated Vinyl is inspired to write a new album after being cuddled in her dreams by Princess Luna as part of a new campaign to help rehabilitate the image of darkness.
#138 · 2
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Whew. And that is my slate. I will continue to comment on the remainder of the stories as we head forward, including those that do not make it into the final, so please be patient as I slowly make my way through!
#139 · 6
· · >>horizon >>FanOfMostEverything
>>FanOfMostEverything
>>Posh
Time for some more sweet mashuppy goodness:

Time Enough For Lamias: It's the exact same story as TEFW (except maybe Octavia got eaten instead of them breaking up), but then you add one final line: "And then they ****ed and she ate him, the end."

Pinkamena's Chamber: Daring Do makes the mistake of listening to a James Joyce book-on-tape while descending down a narrow passageway. Behold, the chronicle of her hallucinations.

The House Comes Dazzling: Strong Arm's always looking for new enforcers, and the more down-on-their-luck, the better. Meanwhile, the rest of us finally get the Sirens v. Discord fic we've all been waiting for.

Sleep and Consternation: Y'know, the other thing Luna could try is removing all the little foals' and fillies' need to sleep. That might work, at least until their poor parents band together with a personified version of sleep itself to seek revenge...
#140 · 9
· · >>Posh >>FanOfMostEverything
I'm off at a gaming convention this weekend and getting solid Internet time for the first time in about 48 hours. I'm glad to see >>FanOfMostEverything and >>Posh (edit: and >>CoffeeMinion) kick-starting mashups. ^.^ In lieu of the reviews I don't have time to write, maybe I can at least chip in on those!

Mashups, Obvious Matchups Edition

Twilight Sparkle Lays A Wake - Sleep-slapeing jinxed a-japing; or, Pronky Pie pranks a Twi unto unsomnia by egging her with rotten puns until the sunny slides up.

Send Only Swan Song - The Stranger goes to ask Equestria to return matter to the universe and prevent its ultimate heat death. Instead, he accidentally unleashes grey-goo nanites that eat everything.

Time Enough After Midnight - Vinyl is suffering from creative block, so Star Swirl teleports into the future to fix history and restore the wubs. When he realizes Octavia is already helping comfort her, he shrugs, and all three of them make out.

Cutie Unmarked By Dawn - The Cutie Mark Crusaders enlist Twilight Sparkle to discover how Magnet lost her Cutie Mark in a locked room, only to discover the unspeakable truth of how her dad Blueblood was involved.

Kintsamia - A stallion-eating monster falls off the wagon after trying to reform, and rips out Time Turner's throat. Pinkie Pie and Spike glue him back together before Twilight finds out.

Magic is Dazzling [Part #1] - Luna gets sick of Twilight's bullshit and banishes her to the sun, so in order to save the Winter Moon celebration, she shrugs and hires a bunch of redemption-seeking ex-sirens, and everything works out more or less by accident.

Pinkamena's Wub - Horizon's authorship reaches critical mass and breaks both narrative and temporal structure with the weight of a billion author guesses.
#141 · 4
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>>horizon
Twilight Sparkle Lays A Wake - Sleep-slapeing jinxed a-japing; or, Pronky Pie pranks a Twi unto unsomnia by egging her with rotten puns until the sunny slides up.


horizon was a mistake

mash-ups were a mistake

someone stop the hurting

someone take the pain away

I was over. This was done.

...

uh, I mean. *ahem*

Death By Dazzling: Blueblood seeks redemption for his lascivious ways, so Sunset Shimmer takes him to band practice to befriend the girls. Unfortunately, Rainbow Dash's rockin' power chords cause his head to cave in on itself. They decide to frame Principal Celestia for the murder.

Pinkamina's Room: ...I can't. I can't do this, I just...

I just can't. I need to

lie down

for a while

someone take the pain away
#142 · 6
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Huh. Nine of the finalists were in my personal top ten, and one of the others is the one I wrote. Neat. I am sorry to see Music After Midnight didn't make it.

>>CoffeeMinion
Pinkamena's Chamber: Daring Do makes the mistake of listening to a James Joyce book-on-tape while descending down a narrow passageway. Behold, the chronicle of her hallucinations.
For the record, I would happily read this.

>>horizon
Twilight Sparkle Lays A Wake - Sleep-slapeing jinxed a-japing; or, Pronky Pie pranks a Twi unto unsomnia by egging her with rotten puns until the sunny slides up.
Tell us again how you didn't write Pinkamena's Wake.
#143 · 3
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I'd like to give special shout-outs to Send Only Memories and Music After Midnight, which I'm sorry to see did not make the cut.

Death By Pinkamina's Wake: Blueblood attempts to read Pinkie Pie's latest novel, only to suffer an aneurysm that collapses the upper right hemisphere of his brain.

EDIT: I did not read Pinkamina's Wake out of very justified fears that the same would happen to me.
#144 · 6
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I'll try my hand at a few mash-ups. They seem fun.

Death by Lamia: Princess Celestia grows tired of Blueblood's irreprehensible behaviour and incontrolable urges, and in an effort to give him a taste of his own medicine, he arranges him to seduce a mythical creature. Contains sensible material regarding murder, sexual abuse, and eating disorders.

At the Wake of Dawn: Starlight wakes up and can't make head or tails of her own thought process. Deeming these thoughts not fit to share with the rest of Equinity, she decides to exile herself. Monologues, regrets, divisive literary choices.

Cutiesugi: When a filly appears having lost her cutie mark, Pinkie Pie, Spike and Apple Bloom decide to paint her a new one. Mystery, Introspective analysis of the worth of the individual, Arts and Crafts tips.

Room Enough For Wub: Vinyl Scratch summons an echo of Starswirl's mind through an accident involving her turntable and a bottle of wine. They both bond and share happy times together. High-level magic, bogus tunes, questionable ethics, heart-warming romance.
#145 ·
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And with that, I've reviewed all the finalists.

Including my own, evidently.

:trollestia:
#146 ·
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Georg’s second Round Micro Reviews for the new stories on my slate The Darkest Hour Scores are letter grades for Plot, Technical Work, and Characterization mushed together, with an E for stories I find particularly Enjoyable. Ranked by how I like them, not necessarily how perfect they are on the score. (and posted all at once, from top to bottom so they line up on the chat.)
#147 ·
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I... still have a lot of things to read if I want to review everyone. I might actually need to back down from my promise to get to everyone. If you super want my feedback, please poke me and I promise I'll do it. Otherwise I'll see what I can do but I might be done now that I got everything on my slate and the finalists. I really need to write. >_>
#148 · 6
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Well, how 'bout some Finalist Mashups: Hopefully Not Duplicating Any edition!

Twilight Sparkle Lays a Wake: After a night of very poor sleep, Princess Purplesmart makes the shocking discovery that James Joyce has been reincarnated as an alicorn princess!

Room and Consternation: Luna takes her plan to get through to the young'uns WAAAAY too far.

The House Comes For Wub: Fluttershy and Discord haven't spoken since their breakup. Then Zephyr Breeze comes crashing back into their lives with a stolen time machine, and a pissed-off minotaur and an on-again/off-again Time Lordy-type come looking for him. Now our erstwhile lovers must reconcile their differences and help Zeph escape or risk having Fluttershy's reformation of Discord be erased from history, thus returning him to bad guy status and condemning Equestria to eternal chocolate milk rain... (Also Zeph gets shipped with Vinyl Scratch because of the title, I guess?)

Lamia By Dawn: After arguing all night about the relative merits and underlying messages of some of their favorite Writeoff stories, several authors adjourn to a locked room where a most unusual form of entertainment has been summoned. Hours later, lone survivor Cold in Gardez is seen leaving the premises carrying a fireplace poker and a badly chipped coffee mug...
#149 · 3
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....Aw, you guys... :)
#150 ·
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Congrats to the winners and all the participants!
#151 ·
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>>Bachiavellian

So... I feel incredibly toolish right now, with the whole promising a publish and not getting it out. :S

In all honesty, it was a lot harder than I expected to get back into the mindset I was in when I originally wrote the story. I guess that's what happens when you abandon something for two years. :P

Still, I've made some good progress and I've finally figured out what I want to do with the themes. So, I guess the challenge was kinda sorta a success, in that it finally got my wheels turning. Concession prizes for everyone!

Anyways, congrats to all our winners and participants this round! It looks I was really out of sync with what everyone else enjoyed--I actually had "To Fly" at the top of my slate. Always interesting to read differing opinions, though, so thanks for that, guys.

Gonna keep plugging away at editing; hopefully I'll be done before the next competition starts. See you guys then!