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#1 · 1
· · >>Rocket Lawn Chair >>Samey90 >>Roseluck >>Zaid Val'Roa
Review—
Prompt relevance: high
Style: smooth lines of varying width, well shaded
Background: none
Story potential: low
Result: mid tier

The picture is well drawn, though it punches me right in my uncanny valley for some reason. I unfortunately can only see the one type of fic coming from this, the “Pinkie Pie is secretly sad” kind.
#2 · 1
· · >>Zaid Val'Roa
I think the facial proportions and subtle details—such as shading to show depth on her eyelids and muzzle, the highlights in the tears, and the fuzz in the mane and ears—really make this picture and A+ in my book. Facial close-ups sometimes means playing with fire (especially when it comes to eyes, I've found), but you've done a fantastic job of conveying the emotions on her face vividly enough for us to picture what's going on in her head.

>>Moosetasm
I first saw those as tears of happiness, with Pinkie imagining all the smiles she'll put on ponies' faces. I do get a twinge of uncanny valley from her eyebrows(?), but not enough to detract from the picture's quality for me.
#3 · 1
· · >>Zaid Val'Roa
>>Moosetasm
The picture is well drawn, though it punches me right in my uncanny valley for some reason.

Same here. Looks to me like she's lying dead in the coffin, yet she's crying. Also, I briefly considered writing a story based on this one (but I didn't precisely because it'd be a "Pinkie is secretly sad" story).
#4 · 1
· · >>Zaid Val'Roa
>>Moosetasm
Maybe Pinkie secretly has a thumbtack (hooftack??) in her leg and doesn't want anyone to know she's in pain?
#5 · 2
· · >>Zaid Val'Roa
Oh, this image is very clean, by the way. The image is framed well, and the shading is subtle. The subtle shading might actually be what's giving some people a weird vibe, but I think it looks alright. It's well done!
#6 · 1
· · >>Zaid Val'Roa
(Art) Genre: Maximum Ponks

(Art) Thoughts: Well, this is just plain gorgeous. It also leaves lots of ambiguity in terms of the emotional "message" that Pinkie is sending. Clearly it's something, and it's strong; but there's room to take it all the way from the positive to the negative. Well done, Artist; no wonder it got a bunch of stories.

(Art Tier): Maximum Points
#7 · 2
· · >>Zaid Val'Roa
The Mask?
Nice job on the expressions and coloring. It looks a trifle flat for a pony face, which may be part of what’s behind the uncanny valley comments. Well done overall. Top tier.
#8 · 1
· · >>Zaid Val'Roa
You're nearly a good laugh
Almost a joker
You're nearly a laugh
But you're really a cry
#9 · 2
· · >>Trick_Question
What bothers me the most about this drawing (and of course I only noticed after it was done) was how small and flat Pinkie's muzzle feels in relation to the rest of her face. There's little distinction to where it meets the rest of her face, and it lacks volume as a result. I don't know if that's what caused the uncanny valley effect for some, but it's what did for me.
Aside from that, I'm farily content with how this turned out. I tried a new shading technique that I think I may master in the future.
Also, uh... I did the trailing tears the day after I did the ones in the corners of her eyes, and I didn't notice I was using very light grays instead of very light blues, which made those trailing tears look more, let's say, viscous than I intended.
>>Moosetasm
I actually envisioned this as Pinkie soldiering on through pain (physical or emotional) and doing her best to be as happy and positive as possible. So >>Roseluck was quite on the money. Besides, I've always been a fervent believer that execution trumps everything else when it comes to stories. There's no shortage of ways of making well-known stories seem fresh, so the limited story potential didn't bother me all that much.
>>Rocket Lawn Chair
I'm glad you liked it!
>>Samey90
A corpse who keeps crying could be an interesting premise. I'll steal it.
>>Roseluck
I'm glad you think the shading looks nice, I was afraid of overdoing it. Hopefully I can improve and make better art entries.
>>CoffeeMinion
Thanks. I was hoping people would project whatever they wanted onto Pinkie's mind, as well as whatever the reason for hiding it were. As I said, execution makes or breaks a story, and I trusted people could make interesting stories based on this.
>>GroaningGreyAgony
Yeah, that's what I felt as well. Live and learn. I'll keep it in mind. I'm glad you liked it either way!
>>Fenton
plays harmonica in the background
#10 · 1
· · >>Trick_Question
>>Zaid Val'Roa
May I use this art piece for my completed "Letting Go" story on Fimfiction?
#11 · 1
· · >>Zaid Val'Roa
>>Trick_Question
For the record, Zaid has responded to me in the affirmative. :pinkiehappy:
#12 · 1
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>>Trick_Question
Is true. I have.