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On the Verge · FiM Short Story ·
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Overseeing Her Domain
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#1 · 3
· · >>GroaningGreyAgony
Particularly, I like this one the most. It has that eerie feeling of isolation gathered in a tv-static-like picture. Perfect for the spooky season if you ask me. I have no real nitpicks for this piece.
#2 · 2
· · >>GroaningGreyAgony
The texture really deals the deal here. Pinoy's description of tv static is spot-on. That plus the nice dollop of asymmetry between sun and moon make for a really killer picture.
#3 · 2
· · >>GroaningGreyAgony
I'm gonna bring up Berserk, because I have to. This piece reminds me of one of Miura's more picturesque panels, where he tries to capture the particular mood of a particular character by treating the panel like a painting. Much like Van Gogh, or the sodomites lurking on /a/, Miura has a knack for framing a character within a piece in such a way that there's a beautiful war going on between the symmetrical and the asymmetrical, between the beautiful and the rugged.

The detail alone is exquisite. More than any other this round, this feels like the work of a genius.

Or maybe just a highly intelligent rodent. One can never be sure.
#4 · 2
· · >>GroaningGreyAgony
I do have one suggestion, not a critique, but it’s that the artist make Luna smaller than she already is. It would really enhance the feeling of grandness that this picture inflicts.
#5 · 3
· · >>GroaningGreyAgony
I swear I can hear the chorus of Muse's Megalomania everytime I look at this....

Yeah, this is really good. You convey a real sense of something just being wrong, in that weird Lovecraftian sense. Both Luna and the moon are breathtakingly still, and not just because they are an actual static image--it feels like a scene of absolute silence and stillness, right before everything starts exploding to the sound of an orchestra and Thom Yorke wailing. Great stuff.
#6 · 2
· · >>GroaningGreyAgony
Ever since I learned about how they animated Batman TAS, I've always kind of been intrigued by the white-on-black concept.This is super cool. The shadows and the highlights around Luna's wings do a great job of conveying the feeling of light, and I love how the top and bottom of this piece kind of just fades away into black, leaving us focused on the things in the middle.

Thank you for submitting!
#7 · 1
· · >>GroaningGreyAgony
This would be amazing on scratchboard.
#8 · 1
I think the snort clouds (I assume that's what they are) are bizarre.

Earth would look better pitch black in the back with a crescent of illumination visible toward the Sun.

That's all I got.
#9 · 1
Oh! Also the shadow on the lower-right should curve over that crater, not bisect it straight.
#10 · 1
· · >>GroaningGreyAgony
This picture is stunning and it makes me think of this song every time I see it.
#11 · 4
· · >>Meridian_Prime
>>PinoyPony, >>thebandbrony, >>No_Raisin, >>Anon Y Mous, >>Meridian_Prime, >>Bachiavellian, >>Trick_Question, >>wishcometrue

Overseeing Her Domain

Wow! Thanks for the gold, and the wonderful comments with their flattering comparisons!

The seed of this idea started with the prompt I submitted for this round, “The Longest Shadow.” I retooled it a bit when I realized that “On the Verge” could refer to the terminator, the line of partial shadow that separates the light side from the dark side.

The medium here is black paper with white pencil. I love the resulting texture, and I felt very much in artistic control as I drew this piece. The sun and planet were given their start by tracing around a bottlecap; everything else is freehand. The stars in the sky are artistic license; most stars are not visible in daylight on the moon.

Those aren’t snort clouds; it’s her mane, which I tried to make symmetrical for some reason.

Thanks again, and see you all next round!
#12 · 1
· · >>GroaningGreyAgony
I have like 80-90% of a fic for this done and I am incredibly frustrated that I didn't manage to finish it, because this piece deserves it. When I do finish it (in the next few days if it damn well kills me) I wouldn't mind linking back to here to credit this artwork, if I have your permission? The story wouldn't exist without it after all.
#13 · 2
· · >>Meridian_Prime >>Meridian_Prime
That hurts. You can certainly link back. Looking forward to seeing the completed work!
#14 ·
I actually finished it about 10 minutes before you made this comment? Coincidences are weird. Also, time differences, hence why it took so long to reply!

I think I might just publish it mostly as is; it hasn't been proofread or edited by anyone but me (or at all yet because I've been lazy), but that kind of keeps it in the spirit of the writeoff! The only thing that's missing now is the cover art, and I wanted to ask if I could use this? Honestly nothing else would really fit as well; I turned this picture into an actual scene in the story so it makes a lot of sense. If you'd rather I not, I'll find something else--just thought I'd ask.
#15 · 1
Fic is up! Thanks again, hope you like it.