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#19324 · 5
· on Aligore, the Alicorn Princess of Gore
Banned for using the words “A howl in the dark”. It gave me PTSD.

...10/10
#16268 · 4
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>>Posh
I've come here to defend my stance on pizza in bags.

Applejack shall not be mocked for such a want in her life. Leftover pizza shall, and will always, be shoved into bags of her liking. Cannibal or not, please respect her decision to do so.

Thank you.
#17289 · 4
· · >>Bachiavellian
Just your daily intermission to say thank you all for having such great opinions and thoughts on every fic. I haven’t seen one harmful word thrown out at a story yet and I’m so happy to be here lol.

I was just so afraid to come back to my fic and have someone tearing it to shreds but so far everyone has gotten beautifully done constructive criticism. (Just thanks y’all omg <3)
#17345 · 4
· on Fluttershy Converses with a Tree
To all of you, thank you so much for reviewing this,,, thing. My brain wanted to make her whole situation different in the end. I didn't even think about her being a drug addict. My original plot was pretty convoluted and I really should have left it at "Fluttershy is having hallucinations after she is off of her drugs for a while from social pressure".

Crap.

Now that I think of it that is a decent plot.

Anyways, thank you for reviewing this. If you couldn't already tell, this is probably the second fic I've ever completely written out. :/

>>Miller Minus
I agree that a more central plot to this story would have helped it a lot more. I also do realize that I probably used the words "peace and tranquility" (or words like that) at least a billion times in here. In my revisal of the story there is going to be more pacing and descriptions. She's going to lick the tree xd

>>RogerDodger
I'm so sorry bro. My 12 o'clock brain could not comprehend what the rules were trying to convey to me.

>>HiTime
Thanks for the feedback! I knew that there was going to be some character breaking because she was having hallucinations. I tried to not have her immediately break character but I don't think only 2,000 words can slowly descend her into madness. I probably, might have, maybe, needed more words lmao Also, thanks for being honest about your feelings to this story without being harsh. Very much appreciated! :D

>>Bachiavellian
I-I never expected my narrative to be good. That is probably the best part of a horror story. It's supposed to be, well, horrific. I'm so happy you think I've really got something here. :)

If you're talking about the typos at the end:
She murdered her best friend, all for a vague promise that couldn’t be filled.

The tree spoke, “don’t start getting down on yourself, I never stated the exacts of the promise. Wouldn’t you like to know them?”

That was to show that this was definitely all in her head, although you probably already got the idea. If there are other typos its most likely due to me not knowing exactly where commas go. You could even look back on this entire thank you letter and find places where commas should or shouldn't be lmao.

I like playing with the unreliable narrator stories, and having a reliable one swoop in at the end to show what actually happened, and it wasn't just her hallucinations playing tricks on her. I think that in revisions I'll do that. ;)

Thank you so, so much for the advice. <3
#17419 · 4
· on Werewolf Hunting Sucks · >>BlueChameleonVI
Hey, my town has a meeting place called-- and you guessed it-- The Meeting Place.

I reaaaaally enjoyed this fic. I like the humor, the pacing, and especially the Halloween themed plot.

10/10 “I’m glad he didn’t shoot little Suzy” -ign
#17686 · 4
· on Big Important Wizard · >>Paracompact
She had waited outside Professor Feghoof's office while Sunburst received his grades.


This reaaaaally put me on edge. It was a serious fic up until that moment and it would have completely ruined it if you had acted upon it.

Just because you put the professor's name in there kind of put it down a notch. I’m all for references but in a fic this serious it shouldn’t be there.

Overall this story is pretty good but holy shit that grade card is a bitch. Nobody on earth puts ‘you are a big fat failure. Have a nice day :)’.

I do enjoy the parts with Cherry in it and having her cheer up sunburst. It was sweet... like cherries 🤔
#17715 · 4
· on The Dragon of Hoofholt · >>Chris
Such a beautiful story and such beautiful wording.

It would take me hours to point out all of the great things about this story. Overall, simply amazing.
#17944 · 4
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>>CoffeeMinion
yyeeeeEEEEAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHH
#17979 · 4
· on Big Important Wizard
>>Paracompact
"Wait, guys, I'm not that kind of idiot, I'm just this kind of idiot!" Live and learn.


This sentence is the embodiment of the writeoff
#16265 · 3
· on White Lies · >>Posh
>>Not_A_Hat
>>Astrarian
>>Misternick
>>Fenton
>>Posh
>>dragon discord
Thank you all for reading my first fic ever! I really appreciate all of this feedback!!

>>dragon discord
>>Not_A_Hat
Thank you! I did this all on my phone, so that is why I think there is a few uncapitalized "i"s in there. :'/

I think I might upload a longer version of this fic, without the chicken part and without the basement scene in the end. Just to keep you vaguely unsure of what actually happened.

>>Posh
carnivorous diets are commonplace enough that the cop doesn't even bat an eyelash at the revelation that Cupcakes is eating chicken...

You're so right about that rip.

Also,,, you don't eat pizza from bags? Do you have leftovers? xd

>>Fenton
I-I'm so sorry sir. Please,, can you forgive me?

>>Misternick
Thank you so much! I'm glad you really liked this :D

>>Astrarian
Make me feel like you barely got away with it and you're giddy with it. I'd have much more fun with it that way.

Don't worry ;) its gonna be a lot more suspenseful when I edit this.