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#2631 · 5
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You might consider this spam, but oh well, let's spam kindness...

Congratulations to all who made it this far and through the finals...
with less than ten hours left on the clock, only time can tell who will win.

The competition is rough- there are some really good stories out there...

All in all, I wish you guys luck! May the odds be ever in your favor!
#18897 · 5
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I love the prompt! There is no way I'm skipping this!

I'm burning midnight oil right now, since I just got back from a trip! Gotta get it finished!

Good luck to everyone! I can't wait to read the other entries!
#3297 · 4
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Let's start a spam! =P
Heh, Just kidding around...

>>007Ben
>>Mordred
Congrats to you two!
Same thing happened to me! Woo! First time in the finals!
May I gloat with you guys? Please?

I'm thrilled to be in the finals, I can say I have made it!
However, In all honesty, I feel a little out of place in the finals.
I've intruded on the prestigious space of professional writers, when clearly, I am an amateur masquerading as a professional.
...Can't really complain about making it into the final rounds... many writers would give anything to trade me places.

>>CoffeeMinion
Hey, don't say that about your own story.
Heck, I'd even say you would get at least a decent score.
Even if life is a bit hectic, it's usually in that time of trial that the writer pulls out their best stories when they don't mean it...

All in all, Congrats to all who made it to finals! Good Luck, and may the odds be ever in your favor!
#2735 · 3
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Welp... I submitted my fic
And it's absolute crap.

Meh, I guess that's what you get for Ibuprofen running through your veins like hemoglobin. It'll probably be spotted quickly and eliminated. At least I can say I tried.
#18828 · 3
· on Their Princess · >>Trick_Question
Is it safe to thank everyone for the reviews yet? I saw Baal Bunny do so without repercussions, so I take it that I'm safe!

First of all, >>Samey90
hit the nail on the head. Concept is extraordinary. Yet, my hubris (am I using that correctly? Eh… Meh) is the inexperienced writing. Have yet to harness voice and emotional arcs (Thank you Coffee Minion and Miller Minus). Now, the hard part, does anypony have pointers? I need a little more practice… a lot of practice. Got it under control. Bad habits I need to correct- provide spacing and make sure I have dialogue correct.

Now, >>CoffeeMinion
discovered my tracks easy. Yes, it was a hurry, with 3 hours to prep it before heading off to work. I mean, I started work two hours before the deadline, just enough fuel to set my rump on fire in the middle of the night. I had a hard time coming up with an idea that sticks to the prompt, yet didn't trap me in a dead end. Every Idea I jotted down missed the mark or ran out of pixie dust. Then, Inspiration! Only, one slight problem: I didn't have all the time in the world! With the Midnight Muse disturbing my beauty sleep, screaming “You want the best Idea? HERE IT IS!” My muse woke me at 11 o’clock in the evening before the premature deadline! Best idea ever! so, yes, TLDR: I submitted an unpolished story in a crucial moment. For sake of time, I didn't have time to sculpt everything… spacing and punctuation included

As for what many of you touched on, but >>Trick_Question
has suggested, “have somepony run with me line by line" I have yet to find a exceptional editor that has the time and patience with all the bad writing habits I have. Any references or pointers that can help me find an editor?

Unfortunately, I'll give a counter-argument to >>Miller Minus
(please don't hurt me!). The reason to why it's a little jotty is that I have taken a long hiatus from writing or view other works of writing. The reason? Killer number one to my fictions is that they are unoriginal. As you can see with a story on this site “Super Secret Mission" copied Calipony’s “Lava Monster" on Fimfiction. You can see more examples if you look for them. But, lets face it- there are rarely any original ideas left in the world. This includes this idea. The more I invest time in looking into other’s works, the more my subconscious copies it. It's real problematic. That's how I got this idea, pure and true. But, along with the upside of ostracizing myself from other ponies’ works, the more rough and flat my writing goes- it loses it’s magic. I'll take your advice in small steps. I need to start finding my voice- without imitating another’s. Balance is key. All in all, Thanks! This comment is super useful!

Thanks again to others who touched on the same topics!
>>Xepher
>>Paracompact
Yes, thank you, I look back, and that part was a very rushed

Thank you for the comments… I was expecting worse since my unpolished story probably aggravated several readers, but the pleasant surprise was that the comments I had were still constructive, yet didn't ram me with a train of long, undying nitpicks and details. Or… my second suspicion is that many saw through the anonymity veil (I try to be sneaky and undetected, but I stick out like a sore thumb). I’m an amateur in the midst of professionals! Nonetheless, I Prefer to believe the first, not the latter. Thanks again! See you in another round!
#19625 · 3
· on Sweet on the Inside · >>Hap >>Pascoite
Here it goes!

I'm also not sure this is proper, but I'll say it anyway! First thanks goes to Pascoite for helping me edit! Without Pascoite, this fiction would be trashed- (trust me, major improvements!) This one is going into my re-write bin for later!

>>Bachiavellian
From the get-go, I knew I was playing a dangerous card by making a Changeling fic. I find those fictions to be very cliche and overused. Not to mention it would blend in with the crowd of similar stories in this round.

But, by far, this is the only idea that made it under the 750 word limit. All others overshot it.

Let's just say the “relation to a picture” constraint threw me for a loop, but now I've seen the other entries, it doesn't have to be complicated. Just be free, and go wherever the picture takes you.

Even if this story is not your cup of tea, Thanks for your comment!

>>CoffeeMinion
Since you bring up grammar issues, I need to study it a bit more. The “SVO” structure (I believe) in the round before last (All The Time in the World), got me into trouble, so I had to mix it up. I overcompensated.

Also, first person is not my strong suit. For some strange reason, I tried to write this in third person, but it wanted to shift over to first person. Dangerous move, but it was worth the experience!

All in all, I'm glad you didn't quit before the [*hr]! Thanks for seeing the heart inside this piece!


>>horizon
In order to make this short, I cut out some of my excuses. I realize that the best way to do this is cut out the exposition and get to the good stuff: your help!

I haven't been very good at beginnings, even at the best of times. Thankfully, Pascoite told me that this would be better than the former opening line, which trust me, major improvement. But, then again, I need to watch my step with dubious word choices.
I missed an opportunity there.

Curse my ignorance, but what does “YMMV” stand for?

There are multiple things you have addressed, from the digression at the beginning to the plot convenience of the disguise failing. Most of which I'm on the lookout for- I've learned immensely from this round, especially from this comment. When in doubt, or when you get a sneaking suspicion or doubt, bring it out and solve it rather than have it ruin your fic.

Thanks again! I can't describe it without sounding a teensy bit mean to the others comments. Don't get me wrong, each has nuggets of wisdom that are priceless. Mind that- this is what I've been looking for! I've got a lot of improvement to do. The first draft and the final draft are very different from each other. But, I'm learning!

I'm sorry if my writing was cumbersome. I understand it's not the smoothest read. I'm working on solving that problem. I'm not out of the woods yet.

Thank you for reading!
#2104 · 2
· · >>Monokeras >>Remedyfortheheart >>Leo
>>RogerDodger
Sorry I'm new here and have a couple of questions. (Some of these questions will be 'no-duh' questions, so please bear with me, I'm just checking...)

For one, is it required to submit a prompt to participate?

And two, for the Prompt, are you looking for phrases like:
"The End of the Line"
"Forbidden Knowledge"
#2111 · 2
· · >>Oblomov
>>Monokeras

>>Remedyfortheheart

Thanks a bunch to both of you!

Also, Remedyfortheheart, to answer your presumption, I do like rice- goes good with many things.... yum.

I have another question though... for 'Original' Minifics, I take it that you stay out of fandom and create something of your own. Or am I overthinking things? So, what I am really asking if you can write FiM stories for this, or not?
#2258 · 2
· on The Faintest Smile · >>Icenrose
I was holding off on this, but It's about time that I should let it out...

(For the Author)

Generally, I liked the detail you put in the story, It paints a clear picture of (as the other reviewers say) "Hanging out with the Bros". It also has the nice touches of the nitpicks and twitches of each character, adding a little more interest. (No one wants to read about a boring character, and you've done well, giving each of them an individual personality, while unifying them).

Now, here is critical part-
It's just me, but the language of the dialogue strikes as a bit uncouth, even for casual talk between buddies. I suggest you turn it down by adding a little more passive side of things (maybe add a little more to peacemaker "Kestrel")... Kestrel seems to be that type, but make her a little more 'Benvolio' (Look it up!) to add depth.
However, keep in mind, this is only my perception, it may be a bad thing to take out the style of language

TL;DR: Detail is amazing, I applaud you on that. You may want to tone it down, the characters come off a bit strong- though that could be just me.

(For the Critics)

To be honest, I need to agree with Aragon, some of the critiques I read can come off as highly offensive.
Trust me, I take everything personally, and it's a really big blow to the spirit when some critics don't give you a second chance.
But what I must touch on the most, to balance these out, is the meaning of 'constructive criticism'

Constructive means to build something... and for the most part, most of these reviews come across as (language is a bit unorthodox, but bear with me) "You're an idiot, there is a mistake here- and here- and here...".
I'm not telling you guys to fluff it up and sugar coat the truth... oh dear Celestia- NO! I actually like it when someone points out an error, I'd give anything to improve my writing! All I'm asking is that you include something to say "here is how you can fix it", and that'll suffice.

It may come across as rude to spell it out to the author like they're a toddler... but if everyone was taught without how to fix their egregious errors, would anyone learn? Some of us cannot look into another's frame of mind, so it's best to point out how to fix it so new writers can learn!

TL;DR: Go through and tell the writer how to fix the problem, any simpleton can point out errors- that is the meaning of constructive criticism. It might come across as extra rude, but we need to learn sometime!

All in all, I'm ranting... here... have some kitten pictures to calm your nerves! (I know it helped me calm down)
#2590 · 2
· on Long Distance Call
Since Anonymity is gone, and the author of many stories have been revealed, I figured it would be safe to reply.

>>FrontSevens
>>The_Letter_J
>>Orbiting_kettle
>>georg
>>Monokeras
>>TheCyanRecluse
>>Xepher

Thanks to all that reviewed my story, it is very well appreciated! I ask forgiveness for having you guys read such an amateur-ish fic. My writing is not decent... my apologies. Frankly, the language is so clunky that you could hear it from a mile away... It'll take a while for me to learn how to master flow- but hey, that's what you are here for!

Anyways, I what I got from the reviews were "fix up subtle detail- don't goad the reader into information overload", "create flow- make sure the language isn't clunky", "Iceberg effect- 'sad stories and their cliches'", and "grammar rules- look up the rules on dialogue".

...That's as far as I know... let me know if I'm missing anything.

Again, thank you to all who reviewed, mostly helps to get some candid reviews (without the anonymity, these reviews would be hard to come by). I'll start working on these spots.