I'm in.

I'm in as well!

Nice narrative about people minding their own health for the effect it has on the other. I do like when poetry doesn't necessarily have the rhymes occur at natural pause points. The rhymes themselves are fine here, but there's no meter. Not a bad starter for my slate.

Everything about this went over my head. Was "steep" in the first line supposed to be "step"? As near as I can figure, someone's carrying something up a hill and has become somewhat of a spectacle to those watching, but I don't know what he's carrying or why. The last line of each stanza has a rhyme on the second-last word, but I don't know what "prowess" is doing there. In the first stanza, I was on board with it being female rhyme, but then the rest of the stanzas trim that extra syllable from the first line only, and I can't figure out what the structure is supposed to be, or what "prowess" even means in this context.

No idea what's going on here from the narrative side or the structural side.

Kind of a meta thing about storytelling, I guess? A bit of a structural puzzle. Each line is one word longer than the previous until it backs off to 5 again and stays there, but I don't know if that's deliberate. At first, it seemed to be thematic with the first couple of lines.

A journey of 1000 miles starts with a single step, huh?

I don't know if the first pair of lines did this on purpose, but I like the way the oddball word ending line one rhymes with the middle of line 2 before settling in to the pattern of each stanza having the same rhyme end every line. There's no meter.

Pretty good. This stuck with me the most.

I was thinking of a disabled student climbing to the school roof when reading this.
But even though that image popped into my head it doesn't really feel connected to the poem as a whole, only a few select words here and there.

As a whole I don't get what's going on. I'm not even sure if all the words here are the one's I'm supposed to read. Is the "steep" in the first line meant to be a "step"? Did typos sneak in or did you place typos deliberately? At this point I'll believe pretty much anythying.

On first read this was a pleasant thought and a fitting metaphor, and pretty much just that. But it keeps growing on me.
Gotta type this comment slowly to really savor the image.
Aw, done already :c

My favorite part of this is the "calories burned" line. Felt like my pace when reading naturally went up for that line.

If it based on a real person's struggle, I'd love to know more about the story behind this

And why people confused by 'steep'? Steep is a slope, it is plain as it can be. Seriously. 😒

oooh. Maybe should've googled that.
Guess a lot of my confusion is just cause I'm no native speaker, and there's a couple words here I've never encountered.

I gave up after googling "limb-porn" with predictable results :/

>>Forcalor
Not really a slope, no. More of a cliff, but that's also well down the list of definitions people will know. I've never heard it used this way.

You're going to use a very nonstandard definition for a very ordinary word where the context is unclear, be prepared for it to be misunderstood.