I'm excited. :)

I really enjoyed the premise here, and how things come together in the end. It certainly improved with a re-read as well, where all of the vitriol is more seemingly deserved, given we know our author. Very good overall.

Damn that is a gut punch and a half. Incredible job with giving enough info to the reader to understand at the right time how things are. It's an excellently written piece.

I really enjoy the prose when Cole is looking at this as a life or death situation, but I have to agree that his attempt for survival getting cut short does deflate the tension a bit more than should be needed. Also, not sure if it's just me, but the boss's dialogue in the ending makes it sound like he put a cart there on purpose?

Uggggggh. I really liked the beginning of the story. It does a good job of giving names to things and explaining the importance, but realizing that you don't need that much detail. The joke at the end and the reveal got me dragging my palm over my face, but in a good way because I was chuckling underneath it all. That said, I do think it could have been explained with a bit less perverse imagery, possibly? It might have made it a bit more enjoyable, at least for me.

I don't have much of an understanding of the biblical background to get more from this than what's presented. That said, what is presented is very good. Crisp, quick, great dialogue and a good ending.

Very interesting sort of creation myth being told, though I'm not entirely sure on the message by the end. It seems to be about humanity exploring the unknown and, potentially, finding things that shouldn't be known through an unbridled curiosity. Whatever the message, I love the style and description, particularly in the beginning. It's just enough to give my mind a canvas to paint even deeper.

An interesting look into a potential future that I have to agree takes a bit to get started. I think there's some very morally grey areas being explored through this tool that's more for psychological than physical torture, especially given how enthusiastic about it that Ramirez sounds.

I really like the interaction between the two characters here, but I'm not sure I liked the payoff we get from the ending. The talk about dinosaurs from different time periods being able to co-exist is pretty neat, along with the explanation that it's more keeping people out of the less dangerous enclosures. I could see this being a neat intro to a longer story, but I'm not sure it works hear as a comedic minific.

Got me to chuckle a lot, and just zany and ridiculous enough to be entertaining without overstaying its welcome.

I think I struggled while reading a bit because perspective seemed to switch between Twilight and Starlight, and the mingling of actions from both in the same paragraphs didn't help.

As for what's going on in the story, I really like it. I don't think some extra context is needed. We get enough of an idea that there is a problem that this strange, maybe dangerous, magic is being used to solve, and we can assume it's related to the timberwolves. There's just enough information about the rituals going on to give us an idea of what's being done, but I do think some more couldn't hurt.

Overall, very interesting, but I think it does need some work to clean it up.

An interesting look at what could have been in the past, before Appleoosa and the like came to be. I think the resolution of the conflict, as little as there is, is fairly quick, though that does help to highlight the naivety of the buffalo in this exchange. Rocky Road's character is on good display, but Compass Rose doesn't get a lot, and that hurts things a bit as well. With some expansion, maybe showing the start of the party's trip into buffalo lands, and maybe even some further interactions between the buffalo and the ponies, could help things here.

I think this fic has a lot of strong things going for it. There's a good introduction with teen aged Cadance and Shining Armor that feels very natural and pretty cutesy. Cadance gets flustered by a reveal, and then after stewing it over (in what I feel is very natural: that her initial reaction likely made Shining feel bad about opening up, and then looking for a way to resolve things), does what only a powerful alicorn could manage to do, probably. Then there's some fairly awkward but appropriately teenage-like colt on colt action. I do think that Shining maybe needs a bit more trepidation about the affair, possibly? I mean, the two are awkward teenagers in a relationship, so it works, I feel, and nothing really came off all that red-flaggy about the interaction.

Overall, I enjoyed it, but, yeah, this could get a looooot more steamy, if wanted.

I really enjoyed the introduction here. All of the OCs feel fairly well-realized for how little time we have with them. I do think, though, that despite the second scene being as it because of a gap of anything else happening, that you could do a LOT more by expanding this. I think the unsettling bits come from not knowing what exactly happened, other than ponies going crazy over something they saw, but if you control the viewpoint character in clever ways throughout, you could have some more unsettling bits of when Klondike and the others go crazy, and have the changes appear sudden to the other characters.

As it is, I'm left feeling like it hasn't met its full potential, despite enjoying the sudden reveal that things didn't go as well as they hoped in the beginning.

I really enjoyed the action when things got into the soccer game itself, the bit of banter, and also the finale of it. That said, there's a lot here that can use some work: dialogue tags, the first scene/setup for the soccer game and some of the prose itself outside of the action of the soccer game.

I think some expansion of the first scene, and possibly even the soccer match itself, would be good for it.

A very heartwarming scene. I think the pacing is very good, and despite some confusing use by Daring Do of "filly," the dialogue is great. That said, I do have to agree with Baal that a little extra about the room or Ace's things could make it a little bit more believable that it's Ace's house she picked to stop in.

I enjoyed the comedy when it came through and the character interactions. It's a sweet little comedic slice of life thing. However, I did have a few problems. The first is that there's a line or two that seem like they should be italicized as inner thoughts, even though the prose flows fairly well with them as written. I also think that Vinyl's signing should be in dialogue, even if it isn't being spoken, though that's a minor thing.

I do think the scene in the restaurant is the weakest of what's currently on display. There are some lack of dialogue tags and I think some work on expanding the conversation might help, even if it falls away into a fight.

Overall, enjoyable, but I'd say it come use some cleaning up.

I think this had a great hook, and it held my attention throughout with some good comedy and a little bit of action. Cheese's voice works well in the prose, with a lot of decent jokes and puns in it and the dialogue, and the pacing avoids it from dragging fairly well. That said, maybe a little bit of expansion between the initial scene and the contact with the sphinx could help, and allow for some potential humor. Maybe a puzzle that needs to be solved, besides just traps?

Overall, a really enjoyable tale with two characters that I didn't think I'd ever see interact.

I enjoyed chuckling at this one. I think it's very in character, though certainly exaggerated, for Twilight to focus really hard on one error and lecturing Daring Do about it, and it makes for some comedic snapshots. That said, I do think there could be some more jokes worked in. I'm unsure about expanding it, as it feels good at the length it is, but maybe trying to get a little bit more in there wouldn't harm it too much.

I enjoyed this piece greatly, and I think parts of it really struck a chord with me. I think we get a good look into Fleur's emotional state and her day-to-day sort of life in Canterlot and what she cares about. I do think this serves as a good start to a longer story that might further explore Fleur's melancholy and her dissatisfaction with her life, and perhaps see her outlook changed. However, as it stands, it still did a wonderful job of drawing me in and expresses some things that I feel about my own life.

I really enjoyed this piece. I think the prose matches Luna's voice fairly well, and the horror that is explored with it is just up my alley. Just enough description, a good pace, and a good look at a potentially frightening aspect of dreams that lies beyond anyone's understanding, except for Luna and her next potential student. That said, I don't know if the horror of Lady Canary's downfall quite hits me as hard as the unnerving things like the Mýrarhryssur and the oddities of the Penumbra, though the line about her vanishing "piece by piece" is chilling to imagine.

I think there's a good bit of suspense built up through this piece, but it could definitely be improved. There are a few parts, like Baal said, where you have the opportunity to explore Jade's thought process a bit more and provide some background earlier in the piece that could do a better job to hook the reader. Still, I enjoyed the build-up to the ending and the reveal, even if it was a little muddled.

While I think the transition was a bit difficult to grasp at first, I quickly fell into understanding. I like what the piece is doing, for sure, and it's an interesting look into an alien mind, and the potential outlook they'd have. While it lacks a bit of payoff, there's a decent comedic moment near the end, and it works as an examination of this alien life form.

I think this piece does a good job of building up personal guilt for our viewpoint character, even if there's the possibility that the full burden of blame is not with him. The sense of paranoia pointed at Professor Spencer, who may or may not really be out to get him, adds a lot to this, but I do think the guilt may need a bit more time to stew to give it some more impact.

The character voice in this piece is phenomenal, and makes for an entertaining read throughout. I do think that her grandfather's will creates a decent something for her to bounce off of and maintain some of the good comedy that's first created with Kladdadle, but for mentioning that we "make our own ghosts," there isn't really much of that in the story. It might be just my reading, but it does feel like she starts to see that she misses him in a way, so some bits when she's alone of her imagining that some spirit is in the house, and might be him, could work. It could possibly play up to the reveal of if Beans is real or not, too.