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They Stood Against the Sky · Original Short Story ·
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#1 · 1
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First thought: "...But how do they stay up?!"

Realization: "Oh, right, that's what the strategically placed button is for." XD

Final verdict: 8 airborne sexy labcoat assassins out of 10
#2 · 2
· · >>Anon Y Mous
This is really, really reminiscent of the first scene of The Last Jedi. And so the last shall be first.
#3 · 1
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>>Pascoite
I was literally about to comment that a couple hours ago but I decided against it.

I do like the planes in the background and the spy look going on. The cracks in the window and the bullets in her make it all the more such an intense picture.

I can tell you actually draw humans, artist. Unlike some people *cough me cough*. Anatomy is great and so is shading.

My only gripe is, “where is she?” I know it’s up for interpretation but it bothered me a little more than it should. Other than that, gr8 job m8.
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Oh, hey, this one's got that action vibe to it. It's pretty nice looking!

I like the fact that the lasers are the only color in the image. It's very popping.
The character also pops well from the background and you seem to have a good grasp of anatomy.

I've got some nitpicks though.
What is she holding in her hand? Is it a detonator or is it a grenade? I see a little thing coming off of it, so I'd assume it's a grenade, but she's holding it like a detonator.
I see the lasers are casting reflections on the glass, but the reflections are too crisp. It's almost like a mirror, though the character's reflection is barely there.
The fabric on her knees are of different sizes. It looks strange.
I'm also trying to wrap my head around where she might be, though I suppose that's up to anyone who writes for this.

Overall, nice work!
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This is great in a lot of ways, but I'm having a lot of trouble orienting myself. My first thought was that she was laying on something curving out, and the planes in the background were reflections. (Probably because I saw the laser reflections, although... shouldn't those curve with the curved glass?) My second thought was that she was on something curving in, but on the ceiling, but that was obviously nonsense. I finally decided that she was in something curving in, and it was on the floor, but wouldn't that mean the snipers are high above her? I dunno. Lots of little things about the perspective here just feel off to me.

Well, there's a lot of tension in the scene, and that's great. She's been shot, I think, and she plans to suicide? I'm not sure what she intends to accomplish by suiciding there, but eh.

That cloud in the background looks like like a hand, and those fighters look suspiciously similar... alright, fine, I'll stop nitpicking. This piece is good in a lot of ways. Some of the details seem off, but that doesn't stop me from appreciating it overall, especially since it's very clearly got story. Great work!
#6 ·
· · >>Hap
I oriented pretty quick, she’s on her back, about to blow something up since she’s about to be shot full of even more holes.

The anatomy is good, the clothing design is classic “how the hell do these stay up on their own?” Her sidearm is missing, nice touch. Her hand is too flat if she’s holding a grenade; if it is a grenade, her hand will be larger. If it’s a detonator, then it’s fine.

The lighting is good, but the background around the window seems sparse; there should be some metal seams or structural ribs.

Those planes behind her... are strange. If this is something like Skycaptain and the world of tomorrow? They just don’t seem to work like real planes (typically they have either engines on the wings or afterburners in the rear, not both) regarding engines.

The wounds are done well. I don’t know if it was your intent, artist, but I’m pretty sure she’s dying: that one shot will have punctured her liver or one of her kidneys.
#7 · 1
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>>Moosetasm
The wounds are done well. I don’t know if it was your intent, artist, but I’m pretty sure she’s dying: that one shot will have punctured her liver or one of her kidneys.


No, it's too high. It's damaged either her diaphragm or punctured her thoracic cavity. Each breath she takes will suck in a little more air into her chest, and the next breath will be just a bit smaller. It's a very recent wound, or there would be pink foam (okay, I know it's all grayscale except the lasers but) building up around the wound.

And that thigh wound is dangerously close to the femoral artery. Depending on caliber, type of bullet, and entry angle, that wound could be anything from "limp to the first aid kid and grab a band-aid" to "lethal within minutes, even if she was in a surgery ward right now."

I'm not sure whether she's lying on her back against the window, or floating "weightless" in an aircraft that is plunging downwards. If it's the latter, how in the world is anyone composed enough to aim at her? If it's the former, then her jacket and hair are a bit too... "floaty."

Other than that, and the few nitpicks others have mentioned, I really like this piece. And not just because of the implausible pants. It looks like an interesting world, and an interesting situation that led up to this point.
#8 · 1
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A snapshot of a pulpy spy thriller, I like it.

The girl is clearly holding a detonator, and it looks like she's about to press the button. Also looks like she's about to get riddled with holes, so this is a tense moment. We don't know if she'll finish her job in time.

I'm assuming she's inside one of the bombers(?) we see outside, but that begs the question of why you would send someone to blow up a bomber from the inside anyway. Don't we have fighter jets and AA guns for that sort of thing?

It could be a different kind of ship, like a dreadnought, since we're bringing up Star Wars here.

I have to scratch my head at the choice of clothing. I can deal with the pants, and even the jacket, but the skin-tight outfit underneath raises some questions. It's not as fetishized as a few other entries (a pattern I'm noticing) but it's still noticeable. Her jacket indicates she was going undercover as one of the crewmen, but...

I don't know, I'm not sure about that. I can totally see an action-packed story coming out of this, though.
#9 · 1
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Well Artist, I'm not going to get a story done at this point, but it's a credit to how visually compelling this is that I have a Gdoc with some noodling toward that goal. Awesome art.