I got something in.

Same here!

Oops, too late for me guys :(

>>Monokeras
So drop some art in the other one...

Nice looping rhyme scheme, and there are no fumbles in the meter. I'm a little unsure of the actual plot. Some people feeling beat down by their jobs watch a parade go by, but whether the music is actual steel drums or just resembles it, I can't tell. It being robots also hints at a more sci-fi setting, but I can't really envision it. And maybe there's not an actual parade, but the robots on an assembly line are being imagined as one? The bouncy, lyrical quality matches the subject matter well.

I think this is someone lamenting that they never connected with people much in general, but it might be specifically love. No problems with the rhymes. There's a fixed syllable count per line, even by half-line, but there's no stress pattern. One instance of bare/bear confusion. Not a bad thought, though it's all pretty vague. I encounter that title occasionally, but I never remember what it means.

Kind of an amusing scene. It seems like it's trying to have a set number of syllables per line, but I did notice at least one that was different. It feels like the narration switches perspectives numerous times, and not in the obvious places, either. I get that some of it might be driven by word choices made in service to the format, but it's still worth trying to pay attention to.

There doesn't seem to be a consistent pattern to the rhymes, and there's no set meter. I like the initial image of these robots partying to the sound of their rattling parts, though at the end, it seems to be relating that to humans as well, and that's where I lose the thread. Is it just saying that humans wished they could have as enjoyable a retirement? It's harder to follow the message through that point.

Tough to pick a fav here.

>>Pascoite

Thanks, Pasco:

And everyone who voted, too. Yeah, I think another stanza ot two shoehorned into the middle will help set the scene better, then it's off to Silver Blade magazine to see if they're interested in renting it from me. :)

Mike