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No Silver Spoon
The sun shoots up in the morning with joy
A cat yawns and stretches ready to feast
The lazy, snoring old man still sleeps in bed
Royal highness jumps on the subjects chest
Her old human does not stir at the blows
Hungry, angry, she springs the clever move
Taking her empty bowl, the beast leaps up
Onto the man she wacks him in the face
He wakes perturbed, and captures the she-cat
Metal bowl of broken hope falls from her
Into her cage she goes, upset in turn
She yells “You filthy screw!” with her cat tongue
The old man is not at all amused with that
Food and water quite stale are served with spite
Is meager and at his own pace, not haste
The cat in the cradle pouts but munches
A cat yawns and stretches ready to feast
The lazy, snoring old man still sleeps in bed
Royal highness jumps on the subjects chest
Her old human does not stir at the blows
Hungry, angry, she springs the clever move
Taking her empty bowl, the beast leaps up
Onto the man she wacks him in the face
He wakes perturbed, and captures the she-cat
Metal bowl of broken hope falls from her
Into her cage she goes, upset in turn
She yells “You filthy screw!” with her cat tongue
The old man is not at all amused with that
Food and water quite stale are served with spite
Is meager and at his own pace, not haste
The cat in the cradle pouts but munches
Kind of an amusing scene. It seems like it's trying to have a set number of syllables per line, but I did notice at least one that was different. It feels like the narration switches perspectives numerous times, and not in the obvious places, either. I get that some of it might be driven by word choices made in service to the format, but it's still worth trying to pay attention to.