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A tragic poem--life interrupted, wondrous visitors crushed. Do I sympathize with the speaker, who is stamped by ennui, or with the bug, who never saw it coming?
I like this, with both its theme of enjoying nature and the comical twist. The "red under white" and "all for the greater good" phrases don't quite fit in the stress pattern unless you force them. This was a fun read.
This work has been accepted for publication; I am taking the draft down. I will update this comment with more info later on.
>>Heavy_Mole, >>Pascoite, >>Griseus
This poem was accepted for publication in The Stillwater Review, vol 13.
This poem was accepted for publication in The Stillwater Review, vol 13.