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Paper Planes
A silly childhood memory?
I once made a paint calzone and called it
a butterfly! But get this:
A high modernist once took upon himself
the soporific task
Of tessellating squares and
(Taking right angles and straight lines,
The high ground with fine wines
&Pythagoreanism to its irrational limit)
Calling the whole thing a human life.
I once made a paint calzone and called it
a butterfly! But get this:
A high modernist once took upon himself
the soporific task
Of tessellating squares and
(Taking right angles and straight lines,
The high ground with fine wines
&Pythagoreanism to its irrational limit)
Calling the whole thing a human life.
So this one is fairly structureless, meaning I'm not going to have much to add. Where to put line breaks is mostly going to be determined by keeping them all roughly a similar length or by the poet's whims.
As to the message? What I get out of it is that human life is as silly a thing as a child making up some nonsense. Which isn't a bad way to phrase it. I kind of like this one.
As to the message? What I get out of it is that human life is as silly a thing as a child making up some nonsense. Which isn't a bad way to phrase it. I kind of like this one.
I honestly thought we'd be getting a lot more free verse entries, but this was one of our only ones!
I really like the mood of this one.—it's almost like a haiku with how contemplative it is. The relationships that it draws between art and human existence aren't completely answered, but I think that's perfect for the scope of a short poem. You clearly meant to incite thought, and you did.
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I really like the mood of this one.—it's almost like a haiku with how contemplative it is. The relationships that it draws between art and human existence aren't completely answered, but I think that's perfect for the scope of a short poem. You clearly meant to incite thought, and you did.
Thanks for submitting!
The tessellations and limits of Pythagoras made me think of Escher, but his art is far from soporific. Interesting imagery.
This starts edging toward:
One of the reasons why I don't like reading poetry. It makes me think of a snippet of a conversation I might overhear in passing and feel oh so grateful that it wasn't a conversation I was involved in. Because I don't understand what it's talking about—I had to look up "tessellating," for instance, to make sure it meant what I thought it meant, and the whole parenthetical bit just leaves me scratching my head.
Now, it's perfectly fine to write a poem that makes arch commentary about current events or ways of thinking. But when you meet a reader like me who doesn't know the details of whatever current event or way of thinking you're commenting on, well, the poem doesn't do much...
Mike
One of the reasons why I don't like reading poetry. It makes me think of a snippet of a conversation I might overhear in passing and feel oh so grateful that it wasn't a conversation I was involved in. Because I don't understand what it's talking about—I had to look up "tessellating," for instance, to make sure it meant what I thought it meant, and the whole parenthetical bit just leaves me scratching my head.
Now, it's perfectly fine to write a poem that makes arch commentary about current events or ways of thinking. But when you meet a reader like me who doesn't know the details of whatever current event or way of thinking you're commenting on, well, the poem doesn't do much...
Mike
As a mathematical Platonist, this pisses me off, author.
But I like the poem, and it's one of the better ones. I'd put it even higher, but I think I'm missing some too-hidden cleverness (the worst kind). The &P especially gives me pause.
But I like the poem, and it's one of the better ones. I'd put it even higher, but I think I'm missing some too-hidden cleverness (the worst kind). The &P especially gives me pause.