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Rising From the Ashes · FiM Short Story ·
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#1 ·
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Not sure how this is "Rising From the Ashes."
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>>MLPmatthewl419
The ashes of a disaster in one’s relationship, perhaps? It is a bit tenuous. If Vinyl had burnt the cello, there’d be more of a connection.

Artist, I’ve seen the “Sorry Octy I [BLEEP]ed your cello” before, so I can’t give top scores for originality, but the pony figures and cello are rendered competently and expressively, if a bit roughly. (Is that wall made of rubber?)

I will call this an upper-mid tier effort. It’s cute but the lack of polish will tend to push it down on my slate.
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This is... pen? Huh, neat.

I didn't actually realize that was Scratch until I read GGA's comment. I think the glasses not being pulled down (or maybe not obviously glasses enough?) was messing with me.

I kinda feel like that corner that Octavia's coming around is throwing me off. This isn't in a white vacuum, but it's also not with a full background; but I can't tell why that wall is there or what it's supposed to be doing for the image.

Nice work on the shapes of the ponies and the cello.
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I liked it, the visual expressions are very neat and I'm a deep fan of anything related to OctaScratch.
As GGA said, the 'Vinyl breaks Tavi's cello' isn't really original but the execution is great.

Bottom top-tier.
#5 ·
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Interesting. Already done a plenty times before, but still interesting if done right as a writer. The visuals aren't really breathtaking, but but they don't leave much to be desired as well. It does it's job as it should. Pretty nice.
#6 ·
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The art is pretty good, though Scratch's head seems a bit off to me. As others have said, this really isn't a very original idea, and the connection to the prompt seems a bit tenuous. And it doesn't help that I got tired of OctaScratch years ago.
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Really great. Octavia and Vinyl's expressions are both really well done, and I love the way you've drawn Vinyl's mane and tail—a shock of hair, for sure.
#8 ·
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I like the facial expressions, they do a good job of communicating the emotional context of the situation. I'm in a similar boat as Not_A_Hat when it comes to the edge/wall (?), though. You might have meant to imply that they bumped into each other at that corner, but IMO, that would mean 2 ponies in a heap with a broken cello, not one pony looking down on the broken cello and the pony that bumped into it. It is as though the cello was walking in front of Octavia.
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@caption_rates
This caption was out shopping when the accident took place. It's still not back because it's making sure the cashier correctly doubles its 50-cents-off coupons. Good job keeping the cashiers honest! 8/10