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Rising From the Ashes · FiM Short Story ·
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She rises from the ashes
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This is a good concept. It would be creepier and more effective if the Artist made a better effort to render an equine skeleton. (Google image search is your friend.) The jaw is a separate piece from the skull, for instance.
#2 ·
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This is creepy as sh*t. Pretty good job on the lighting and the colors but it didn't inspire me at all.

So top mid-tier.
#3 · 1
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I think this would be creepier if you didn't burn her lips off quite so much, or burned the muscles straight down to the bone. To me, it looks like she's got a fairly goofy grin, and I just can't take it seriously.

Very good concept, though.
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Aahhhh hhmmm! AAAAAAHHHHHHHHH! *whines* my childhood. *Rolls over and gasps for air.* I can't breath I can't.....oh my goodness..I'm panicking! I'm panicking! *Pulls out a scroll and quills and frantically writes.*
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2spooky4me Pretty chilling to the bone. Or exoskeleton. Whatever.

Would make for a pretty decently well-done horror story and crossover, if done right. This has a lot of potential going for it.
#6 · 2
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Is that supposed to be bone? I thought the idea was that Celestia is some sort of Terminator-esque robot with just some fake skin covering her body.

I'm not really sure what's going on with her neck, and that part of her mane blowing in front of her seems like it shouldn't be there.

But I think you did a decent enough job conveying the mood you wanted.
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What >>The_Letter_J said.

Unclear if that is flesh removed to expose bone or metal, plating over flesh, or both in different places. The inexplicable red glow on the lower right is evocative. Eye shape suggests malice, which is probably your intent?

Needs technical clean-up, but sound and interesting idea.
#8 · 1
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@caption_rates
No, Celestia! Nooooooo! You're a robot, why are you even smoking captions again? 8/10
#9 ·
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I think the idea behind this is great, and the perspective good, but the skeleton lacks details, and the transition between skin and bone is so sudden that I first thought it was meant to represent Celestia as a cyborg where the 'disguise' skin was ripped off from.