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I really can't fathom how I'd even use the prompt, so I'm probably not going to be able to discern how anyone else did, either.
This is clever. The rhymes all work, and the syllable count never wavers, but the stress pattern does have some hitches in it. Maybe one wasn't intended? In that case, it works well enough for the first stanza that it sets up expectations for the rest. I'm not a scholar of poetry. That is to say, I know some forms and judge how well a poem adheres to it, but there are many forms I don't know the proper names of. So I don't know whether this is a form that you invented on your own or if it's an already defined one. I like the slight variation of the stanzas' ending lines. Nice atmosphere, and it takes a very deterministic view of life. Of course you were going to write this. What else did you have planned to do today?
Nobody ever comes close to that 2000 word limit, do they?
This is clever. The rhymes all work, and the syllable count never wavers, but the stress pattern does have some hitches in it. Maybe one wasn't intended? In that case, it works well enough for the first stanza that it sets up expectations for the rest. I'm not a scholar of poetry. That is to say, I know some forms and judge how well a poem adheres to it, but there are many forms I don't know the proper names of. So I don't know whether this is a form that you invented on your own or if it's an already defined one. I like the slight variation of the stanzas' ending lines. Nice atmosphere, and it takes a very deterministic view of life. Of course you were going to write this. What else did you have planned to do today?
Nobody ever comes close to that 2000 word limit, do they?
There's kind of a cool vibe to this. Though I'm feeling a bit of disconnect between the narrative and the framing device. I understand the story, but then the demon seems to be saying I'm a part of this story, maybe one of the characters, and I'm not really sure how. A few minor editing things. This is teasing around the edges of a cool concept. I see some literal use of the prompt, but I don't know if there's a pattern. I can't find one in the choice of which words to capitalize, and the prompt might suggest flipping that, but in this case, I don't think it would change anything. So if there is an intent behind the capitalizations, it went over my head.
>>Pascoite
And he smiles when he feels like crying
The form is based on the Ballade, which I chose upon a whim. I took some liberties with the repeated line but otherwise tried to stay true.
I apologize for the prompt; I didn't expect it to win. But we never shoot for 2000 word poems here, either.
And he smiles when he feels like crying
The form is based on the Ballade, which I chose upon a whim. I took some liberties with the repeated line but otherwise tried to stay true.
I apologize for the prompt; I didn't expect it to win. But we never shoot for 2000 word poems here, either.
Prompts should—
be a short phrase or figure of speech;
not lock participants into certain characters, settings, or plots; and
be suitable for use as a title for the event; and therefore
be in title case, using the following rules:
the first and last words are capitalised;
articles, coordinating conjunctions, and prepositions 4 letters or shorter are not capitalised;
everything else is capitalised.