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Dosido
A tide is but a celestial calling
An invitation to a grave strong dance
Where each partner circles the other
In barycentric intent
Oceans and air whirling like skirts
Though one partner be bare,
A skyclad lunatic.
Each ripple in Earthly spheres
Calls out across untold years
As cosmic oceans of gas and dust
Ripple and curl in their turn,
A harmony of pressing in
And retreating with intent.
An invitation to a grave strong dance
Where each partner circles the other
In barycentric intent
Oceans and air whirling like skirts
Though one partner be bare,
A skyclad lunatic.
Each ripple in Earthly spheres
Calls out across untold years
As cosmic oceans of gas and dust
Ripple and curl in their turn,
A harmony of pressing in
And retreating with intent.
Free verse, more or less, so no comments on structure.
I like the personification and the word choices here. The one that threw me a bit is I didn't know if "intent" was used twice intentionally to make a thematic point. I couldn't find a purpose to it, so I'll assume the poet didn't notice.
I like the personification and the word choices here. The one that threw me a bit is I didn't know if "intent" was used twice intentionally to make a thematic point. I couldn't find a purpose to it, so I'll assume the poet didn't notice.
There's something pleasantly onomatopoeic about the rhythm of this poem. The seond stanza is like the famous snipped balloon that was once used to describe the romantic movement, but leaves the reader with something rational: "Retreating with intent".