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Dosido
A tide is but a celestial calling
An invitation to a grave strong dance
Where each partner circles the other
In barycentric intent
Oceans and air whirling like skirts
Though one partner be bare,
A skyclad lunatic.
Each ripple in Earthly spheres
Calls out across untold years
As cosmic oceans of gas and dust
Ripple and curl in their turn,
A harmony of pressing in
And retreating with intent.
An invitation to a grave strong dance
Where each partner circles the other
In barycentric intent
Oceans and air whirling like skirts
Though one partner be bare,
A skyclad lunatic.
Each ripple in Earthly spheres
Calls out across untold years
As cosmic oceans of gas and dust
Ripple and curl in their turn,
A harmony of pressing in
And retreating with intent.
Free verse, more or less, so no comments on structure.
I like the personification and the word choices here. The one that threw me a bit is I didn't know if "intent" was used twice intentionally to make a thematic point. I couldn't find a purpose to it, so I'll assume the poet didn't notice.
I like the personification and the word choices here. The one that threw me a bit is I didn't know if "intent" was used twice intentionally to make a thematic point. I couldn't find a purpose to it, so I'll assume the poet didn't notice.