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All the Time There Is
I've wasted all the time I can,
So much to lead my mind astray
As ringing chimes divide the day
While I go chasing frogs again.
I should be carved of sterner clay,
Award each thought an ardent span
And let it finish out its plan
But I am weak, and slump away.
Of scattered seeds, so few began
To grow, and my sparse résumé
Is scant of scenes and short of play-
I've wasted all the time I can.
So much to lead my mind astray
As ringing chimes divide the day
While I go chasing frogs again.
I should be carved of sterner clay,
Award each thought an ardent span
And let it finish out its plan
But I am weak, and slump away.
Of scattered seeds, so few began
To grow, and my sparse résumé
Is scant of scenes and short of play-
I've wasted all the time I can.
Nice sentiment that what is considered wasted time might be the most valuable time of all. Structurally, it's pretty sound, with the swapping rhymes each stanza. The only weak spots are that "again" is kind of a stretch as a rhyme, and "my sparse resume" doesn't fit the stress pattern. I bet with a few more minutes' thought, you could fix that up. Nicely done.
The rhyme structure itself has a quality of cyclicity. The lines "Of scattered seeds, so few began/to grow, and my sparse résumé" break up the rhythm, but intentionally, I think, like a crack in the spoke of a wheel.
>>Pascoite, >>Heavy_Mole
Timeless
Thanks, I am glad you liked it.
On the 19th, I was watching a butterfly dechrysalize while packing the car for a 15 hour trip. I had a sense of trying to sweetly stave off the inevitable, and with the limited time I had in the day, I produced this little thing.
It may be a tell, but I often try to submit metric prompts, and so it worked out on this occasion. Incorporating it as the starting and ending line here was partly a time saving technique.
Timeless
Thanks, I am glad you liked it.
On the 19th, I was watching a butterfly dechrysalize while packing the car for a 15 hour trip. I had a sense of trying to sweetly stave off the inevitable, and with the limited time I had in the day, I produced this little thing.
It may be a tell, but I often try to submit metric prompts, and so it worked out on this occasion. Incorporating it as the starting and ending line here was partly a time saving technique.