Considering a car ran up the guy wire of a utility pole in my area, this wasn't so weird.

I can't tell whether this as an absurd story saying these things actually happened, or if it's a case of the narrator deliberately exaggerating just to entertain his parents (or put off their complaints at his lateness), but I don't think it matters. I enjoy it equally either way, since it's just as absurd to the reader no matter what. It's a hard thing to quantify when that kind of dichotomy strengthens a story or makes it weaker, but I think it works here. Probably because either interpretation doesn't change the meaning or the impact.

Because I could not start my car,
It kindly stopped for me.
The windshield guarded my pale face
From its temerity.

It growled and rose before my nose
And carried me away
Its waves of steel made me flinch
And dive out how I may.

Since then, it seems, I've told the tale
Repeatedly all day
For I surmised the horsepower
Was hampered by the hay.

>>Griseus
>>Pascoite
>>GroaningGreyAgony

Thanks, folks!

And sorry for not commenting this round. This is me trying to understand how free verse works, and even after reading books on the subject and lots of the stuff itself, I hafta say I still don't get it. To me, this seems like a micro-minific with semi-random line breaks thrown in. I'm starting to I'm too tightly wrapped or something... :)

Mike