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The wordplay in this is fun, but I can't figure out what's happening. As near as I can tell, someone is stalking a woman and eventually attacks her, but he does it out of affection, like how ten-year-old boys think playfully hitting a girl is the way to let her know he likes her. She doesn't seem angered by it, though. The accent implied in "Offisa" and the use of Krazy Kat specifically have me wondering if this is supposed to emulate that cartoon or even a specific event in it, but I've never watched it, so I wouldn't recognize it if it did. The rhymes are mostly good, and there doesn't appear to be an intended rhythm. It reminds me of one of those songs that has a catchy tune and fairly rapid-fire lyrics that you just kind of mumble through, but when you actually parse out what they are, the song doesn't really make sense. Something like "Ants Marching" by Dave Matthews Band. Enjoyable to read, don't know if there's a meaning behind it.
I'm struggling to find meaning in this one, too. I had to look up the mythology behind the title, and while I can find a connection with the first stanza, I don't see how the rest follows. That all speaks more to someone undergoing personal turmoil and possibly someone who saved them from it? And I could take the last two lines as the narrator either being saved or condemned, so... I don't know? Sometimes it rhymes, sometimes not, and there isn't a regular rhythm or structure. I never know whether to take intermittent formatting like that as conveying a meaning or just being for occasional aesthetics. Both entries are enjoyable to read but leave me scratching my head as to what they mean.
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