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Cold Water · Poetry Minific ·
Organised by Anon Y Mous
Word limit 15–1000
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Waterlogged
I asked, could I write
A haiku with fifteen words,
A watered-down poem.

Alas, I was one word short.
So now this is a tanka.



Sillier Version

I asked, could I write
A haiku with fifteen words,
A watered-down poem.

Alas, I was one word short.
Real tanka hours, who's up?
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#1 ·
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Well, it's certainly concise.
#2 ·
· · >>Super_Trampoline
Flow broken for me
“poem” is two syllables.
Though meta is nice.

Play on form: a way to turn
Uninspired into clever?

Second Half

English “haiku” need
Indirectness and more depth
To work well for me.

The topic's still pretty thin…
Thanks for writing. Sixth of eight.
#3 · 1
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Ah, the eternal argument over whether certain words are one syllable or two. I pronounce "poem" as two, but there are plenty of people who say it's one. I had a similar argument over "squirrel."

Anyway, this is an odd little piece of metapoetry, but I rather like it. It almost has an Ogden Nash feel to me.
#4 ·
· · >>Super_Trampoline
In times of stress,
Even poets try to
tighten their belts.
#5 ·
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>>Light_Striker
Indeed, this was planned as a haiku, but restrictions often breed creativity, as happened here!

>>GroaningGreyAgony
A 4 6 4 haiku? Truly you are a mad lad!