I think this is well drawn, but it doesn’t fully capture the two characters that the story ends up being about. They seem far too neutral in expression as well, and we know that they are anything but that in the story.

I agree with >>Moosetasm. If this is ‘the calm before the storm’ then they should both have wide smiles reaching their eyes.

Otherwise, I like the style that twilight was drawn in and her big eyes.

Keep up the good work, artist. ;3

Twilight looks real cute here. It's hard to tell who the two ponies are looking at her. I think making the hair shapes more noticeable would help this image. The POV is a really good choice, though.

Seconded >>Roseluck that Twi's pretty adorable. Nice work with the eyeshine! I do have a bit of trouble with recognizing the ponies in the foreground, though. I originally thought that they were stage curtains, or something like that; it was hard to immediately realize that we're looking at snouts + manes, let alone discern who they belong to. Maybe zoom the perspective out just a tad to show more of their silhouette? IDK anything about how to art. :S

God, I love Twilight here.

Again, one part of the drawing done very well (really adorable expression on Twilight), rest of image unfinished. That’s the trouble with scribbles.