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Rising From the Ashes · FiM Short Story ·
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#1 ·
· · >>Monokeras
The best laid plans of mice and mares gang aft ashtray.

This is a draft sketch, but it conveys its idea well enough. The unicorn head has signs of originality, though it lacks in detail.

Mid tier, I think.
#2 ·
· · >>Monokeras
MY EYES! MY EYES! IT BURNS! TOO MUCH YELLOW!

Seriously though, the drawing is neat and interesting but why choosing such a colour for the background?
#3 · 1
· · >>Rao
Is the cigarette supposed to be clipping through the ashtray like that?

This is fairly well done, technically, but it's so very simple conceptually that I'm not sure what to make of it. It's a cigarette in an ashtray, sketchily drawn. If there's more here, I'm missing it.
#4 ·
· · >>Monokeras
First time I looked at the image I had trouble deciphering what exactly it was, but then again, I'm not exactly familiar to ashtrays in my everyday life. Though the piece of encryption was still there.

I'm not really understanding what kind of mood you're attempting to put with your piece of art, honestly. With smoking, you'd typically see a very serious setting with very serious individuals inside a very seriously saturated area, since that's what's normally done with something that's supposed to give a serious feeling toward the viewers. With this, there is no shading nor is there any proper consideration with the background, that being a very, very bright yellow. I'd like to imagine a story with the set pieces given in the art, but whatever I try, it conflicts with the overall contrasting feeling the visual aspects of the image gives off. Yellow is a very goofy color, and maybe it could fit within dark humor (?), but even that would be a stretch for me.
#5 ·
· · >>Monokeras
I guess yellow isn't the worst color you could have used for a background.

This really doesn't leave me with much to say, but maybe someone will be inspired by it?
#6 ·
· · >>Not_A_Hat >>Monokeras
I dig this. It's simple, but I can see this being a centerpiece on Sunset Shimmer's porch. A little taste of home while she enjoys her human habit (because leather jacket girls have to smoke. It's the law). Damn shame I didn't think of it before. Decent work, mon artiste.
>>Not_A_Hat
Many ashtrays have little indents to rest your cig so it doesn't roll around. I assume that's the intent with the clipping.
#7 ·
· · >>Monokeras
>>Rao Now that you say that... yeah, I have seen that. Thanks for the reminder!
#8 ·
· · >>Monokeras
@caption_rates
Celestia, stop smoking our captions before I can rate them! You're not even a robot this time, you're an ashtray! But actually in hindsight that's super clever. 8/10 for caption, 11/10 for Celestia
#9 ·
· · >>Monokeras
I like the simplicity in that one, but I think the yellow of the background was a bad choice: it's far too aggressive, while the them actually depicted looks like it's taken from a moment of relaxation. I think a more brownish/sepia color would've enhanced the impact of this piece.
#10 · 3
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>>Fenton
>>GroaningGreyAgony
>>wYvern
>>horizon
>>Not_A_Hat
>>Rao
>>The_Letter_J
>>Kritten
I'd like to apologise for the background. This was drawn at work in 5 minutes using whatever fell under my hand, which turned out to be a yellow Post-it™. I scanned it using the combo printer-fax-scanner of my office and here we go.

Will try to do something less rushed next time. Thanks for all that found it nice despite its obvious flaws!