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I'm kind of, I don't know, not surprised this got last? It seems to be a recurring theme on here, such that I wonder if I should even bother posting stuff. And no, this isn't some plea for comments like "No keep going and arting" because that's a waste of your time and mine and won't actually change anything. We'll just have to see.
Anyway, in regards to this piece, some background! So this is drawn on like a 7-8 foot diameter circle in the center of a certain city block where I live, and definitely looks waaay better irl than in a picture. It didn't help that I couldn't seem to take a straight picture either, though. The question might come up, though, of why did I do it there? To which the answer is that my city has a yearly chalk drawing competition here and it got canceled, so I wanted to do some art here in tribute to that. So I went and killed two birds with one stone, so to speak.
>>Bachiavellian
Surprisingly, the planning didn't actually take that long. The execution, on the other hand, took quite a few hours in the very hot sun with no shade anywhere nearby. It was also kinda exciting because I kept running out of chalk and had to dig through the next container in the hopes of finding something. I'm not sure if the fact that it took you a couple minute to realize it's chalk is a compliment or a criticism, though xD
>>KwirkyJ
First up, your perception of "is this an original round or not" is entirely your fault. There is nothing non-original in it, and was drawn as an original piece. In regards to my little white stuff there, I'd rather have it crudely censored than not censored at all.
>>thebandbrony
I love chalk too! In fact it's probably my favorite medium to draw in, and was pretty well drawn in chalk simply because I love chalk. Also because it really was an impressive sight in real life, refer to the background section above. So could it have been done in some other medium to the same effect? Yes, but so could literally any other art piece in existence. Idk, that seems to come off rather harsh, which is definitely not my intent toward you.
>>DuskPhoenix
The contrast of each side was kinda the intent of the piece, so at least I pulled that off.
Otherwise: ok so like, dude. Oh no, there's a tiny edited clump of stuff that isn't my artwork still in the photo, how terrible. As I said before, I'd rather crudely censored than not censored at all. Also, about the color, I kinda thought it was such a tiny portion people would just not care and understand that shit happens sometimes. I mean, hell, some idiot skateboarders ruined the other chalk piece I had done nearby about two days before this one. So could I have color matched it? Yes. Did I feel like I needed to? No.
EDIT: And, I don't know, it's just such a frustrating thing to nitpick. Like, you didn't even mean to, but it's just the kinda thing that pushes all my buttons the wrong way. I'm not really angry with you per se, just the subject of your comment is so... urrrgggghhhh
In closing, I'm actually rather surprised I got a fic based on this. Thanks a whole buncho dude, I'll actually go and read that one.
Anyway, in regards to this piece, some background! So this is drawn on like a 7-8 foot diameter circle in the center of a certain city block where I live, and definitely looks waaay better irl than in a picture. It didn't help that I couldn't seem to take a straight picture either, though. The question might come up, though, of why did I do it there? To which the answer is that my city has a yearly chalk drawing competition here and it got canceled, so I wanted to do some art here in tribute to that. So I went and killed two birds with one stone, so to speak.
>>Bachiavellian
Surprisingly, the planning didn't actually take that long. The execution, on the other hand, took quite a few hours in the very hot sun with no shade anywhere nearby. It was also kinda exciting because I kept running out of chalk and had to dig through the next container in the hopes of finding something. I'm not sure if the fact that it took you a couple minute to realize it's chalk is a compliment or a criticism, though xD
>>KwirkyJ
First up, your perception of "is this an original round or not" is entirely your fault. There is nothing non-original in it, and was drawn as an original piece. In regards to my little white stuff there, I'd rather have it crudely censored than not censored at all.
>>thebandbrony
I love chalk too! In fact it's probably my favorite medium to draw in, and was pretty well drawn in chalk simply because I love chalk. Also because it really was an impressive sight in real life, refer to the background section above. So could it have been done in some other medium to the same effect? Yes, but so could literally any other art piece in existence. Idk, that seems to come off rather harsh, which is definitely not my intent toward you.
>>DuskPhoenix
The contrast of each side was kinda the intent of the piece, so at least I pulled that off.
Otherwise: ok so like, dude. Oh no, there's a tiny edited clump of stuff that isn't my artwork still in the photo, how terrible. As I said before, I'd rather crudely censored than not censored at all. Also, about the color, I kinda thought it was such a tiny portion people would just not care and understand that shit happens sometimes. I mean, hell, some idiot skateboarders ruined the other chalk piece I had done nearby about two days before this one. So could I have color matched it? Yes. Did I feel like I needed to? No.
EDIT: And, I don't know, it's just such a frustrating thing to nitpick. Like, you didn't even mean to, but it's just the kinda thing that pushes all my buttons the wrong way. I'm not really angry with you per se, just the subject of your comment is so... urrrgggghhhh
In closing, I'm actually rather surprised I got a fic based on this. Thanks a whole buncho dude, I'll actually go and read that one.
Oh shoot, I'm actually here early enough for prompt submission and I have no idea what to do
I wonder who this artist could be. Congrats on making a point to get in, man.
Looks like a pen drawing to me. It really makes me wonder just how big the original was with that line thickness. Anyway, this is a wonderful example of how to use the human brain to your benefit, particularly with the person. If you really look at it, there are surprisingly few lines actually drawn for how good this looks. I love it. I can't really comment on how well it matches the story, since I have no plans to read it, but it's pretty darn cool on its own.
That face is kinda haunting tho....
Looks like a pen drawing to me. It really makes me wonder just how big the original was with that line thickness. Anyway, this is a wonderful example of how to use the human brain to your benefit, particularly with the person. If you really look at it, there are surprisingly few lines actually drawn for how good this looks. I love it. I can't really comment on how well it matches the story, since I have no plans to read it, but it's pretty darn cool on its own.
That face is kinda haunting tho....
Oh shoot I forgot to actually get to this, so sorry about that!
>>GroaningGreyAgony
Thanks for the comment! And yeah, I wanted the landing structures to be very minimalistic and 'industrial.' I actually based this off of a city I'm developing in my head, and this is a rendition of what I call "The Eastern Docks." Fun fact, I actually wanted to add more of the structures in the background, but then ran out of time.
>>No_Raisin
That's so true. Just today, actually, I was reminded that in the Mare Do Well episode we see a hydro-electric dam. Like, wow.
>>Rao
Thank you :). I was not going for that with the colors at all, I just wanted it to be unified because the rest of it is colorless. But hey, that's pretty dang cool - I like it.
>>GroaningGreyAgony
Thanks for the comment! And yeah, I wanted the landing structures to be very minimalistic and 'industrial.' I actually based this off of a city I'm developing in my head, and this is a rendition of what I call "The Eastern Docks." Fun fact, I actually wanted to add more of the structures in the background, but then ran out of time.
>>No_Raisin
That's so true. Just today, actually, I was reminded that in the Mare Do Well episode we see a hydro-electric dam. Like, wow.
>>Rao
Thank you :). I was not going for that with the colors at all, I just wanted it to be unified because the rest of it is colorless. But hey, that's pretty dang cool - I like it.
*That feeling when you have all your art guesses correct - but then change it literally last minute*
I could only hope the impresarios were impressed with the impressionists’ impressions.
Well, that's the best sentence I've read in a while.
Seriously, though. This story has such a good dynamic between Rares and RD, and manages to show off Dash's pride in a way that complements her rather than makes it frustrating. Dash's quick mastery over the painting is a little short-story-ish, but it also makes sense in a way. She is a natural at a lot of things.
In the interest of reducing repetition, I'm gonna direct you to Coffee's comment. He really nailed it.
I... don't really know what this is. Nor how you did it. But it evokes something and I like it. The color of the background, being off-white, really complements the black and red of the tears, and the black shadow-esque border looks really nice. That's all I got, though. I'm sorry I can't really give you much more feedback on it, mate.
(I figured out why I'm having a hard time ranking the art, though. It's basically trying to choose between technical, creative, and emotional)
(I figured out why I'm having a hard time ranking the art, though. It's basically trying to choose between technical, creative, and emotional)
Okay, so first up, this is a very unique and clever piece. So serious props on the idea portion. Also, that lighting is absolutely perfect. I don't know if it was planned, but gosh you did a great job with it.
However, it does have a couple perspective issues. Take the scope, for example. By showing the circle on the front (right) side you give the illusion that we are looking at the rifle from the front. But the way you did the butt and, more importantly, that you did not have the circle on the forestock and barrel give the illusion of looking at the rifle from the rear (As well as just the general proportion/ angle of the piece). The way the monopod(?) attaches to the forestock is also just a little too symmetrical to match with either perspective.
Now, that's a lot, I know. But it's because I love this idea so much that I want to see it succeed. Like, I'm honestly struggling trying to rank these.
However, it does have a couple perspective issues. Take the scope, for example. By showing the circle on the front (right) side you give the illusion that we are looking at the rifle from the front. But the way you did the butt and, more importantly, that you did not have the circle on the forestock and barrel give the illusion of looking at the rifle from the rear (As well as just the general proportion/ angle of the piece). The way the monopod(?) attaches to the forestock is also just a little too symmetrical to match with either perspective.
Now, that's a lot, I know. But it's because I love this idea so much that I want to see it succeed. Like, I'm honestly struggling trying to rank these.
Gosh, dude, this is really nice. The level of detail you were able to achieve is truly commendable. All of the imagery, writing, and statues are done so very very well it's just amazing. I'm also pretty sure what this is without even having to read the story, so again, seriously nice job.
My one nitpick is that in the top middle, that piece with the wings, the wing on the right sticks behind the archway that the structure it's attached to is in front of. Kinda messes with stuff, ya know?
My one nitpick is that in the top middle, that piece with the wings, the wing on the right sticks behind the archway that the structure it's attached to is in front of. Kinda messes with stuff, ya know?
So, I super admire your commitment to making art for this. Like, serious props.
Now, I have no idea what this is based on, but it's pretty dang great. Those letters had to have taken effort, and it paid off. The photoshopping of the cigarette into Nightmare Rarity's mouth is a little rough, but the characters themselves are really amazing. The magic and the drinks came out particularly well too. I feel like the highlights on Normal-Rarity's eyes are a little weird - whether they're too big or just a little misaligned I don't know. But I think the bloodshot effect is very well done. Normal-Rarity's mane and tail are also super top-notch.
I know that's kinda just a smattering of comments with no real structure, but that's pretty much the order my brain saw them in.
Now, I have no idea what this is based on, but it's pretty dang great. Those letters had to have taken effort, and it paid off. The photoshopping of the cigarette into Nightmare Rarity's mouth is a little rough, but the characters themselves are really amazing. The magic and the drinks came out particularly well too. I feel like the highlights on Normal-Rarity's eyes are a little weird - whether they're too big or just a little misaligned I don't know. But I think the bloodshot effect is very well done. Normal-Rarity's mane and tail are also super top-notch.
I know that's kinda just a smattering of comments with no real structure, but that's pretty much the order my brain saw them in.
Hmm.
At first I thought this was going to be a 'younger generation doesn't appreciate the older ones and their traditions' piece, and everything in the story pointed to that. Until the grandpa was mentioned, and then it suddenly switched into a 'person stops what they're doing because of regret.' It was a really weird feeling when it switched, and if you go back to this, I'd say just pick one of those and rewrite the other section to match it. Also, there were a couple of small errors that a quick once over would fix right up.
Otherwise, this was well worth my time. I like the characters, especially. You did a great job making them feel real and likable. I also just plain liked how you approached the topics, they didn't feel too forced as they too often do.
Pretty much, this story has a ridiculously high amount of potential, just work on what message you're trying to convey and expand on it a little to give us more time with Amp.
At first I thought this was going to be a 'younger generation doesn't appreciate the older ones and their traditions' piece, and everything in the story pointed to that. Until the grandpa was mentioned, and then it suddenly switched into a 'person stops what they're doing because of regret.' It was a really weird feeling when it switched, and if you go back to this, I'd say just pick one of those and rewrite the other section to match it. Also, there were a couple of small errors that a quick once over would fix right up.
Otherwise, this was well worth my time. I like the characters, especially. You did a great job making them feel real and likable. I also just plain liked how you approached the topics, they didn't feel too forced as they too often do.
Pretty much, this story has a ridiculously high amount of potential, just work on what message you're trying to convey and expand on it a little to give us more time with Amp.
Gonna be honest here mate, this is good.
Like, I don't even have that much to complain about. The only thing is that the transition between scenes for some reason kept making me reread it. Might just be a me thing, though.
In terms of things I like, oh boy. Just the atmosphere of the piece is wonderful. It knows what it wants to be and it doesn't try to be anything else. I also really like how you worked in a moral in such a non-painful way. It just feels natural, and that's a hard thing to do. That the Kassandra isn't able to comprehend Lyra as anything other than Shatterhoof is also a nice touch.
So, basically, good job man. Def my fav as of halfway through reading these.
Like, I don't even have that much to complain about. The only thing is that the transition between scenes for some reason kept making me reread it. Might just be a me thing, though.
In terms of things I like, oh boy. Just the atmosphere of the piece is wonderful. It knows what it wants to be and it doesn't try to be anything else. I also really like how you worked in a moral in such a non-painful way. It just feels natural, and that's a hard thing to do. That the Kassandra isn't able to comprehend Lyra as anything other than Shatterhoof is also a nice touch.
So, basically, good job man. Def my fav as of halfway through reading these.
So, Sandbar's special talent is passivity? Cool.
The tone kinda fluctuates between whimsical and serious in a weird way, though. That's really the only problem I have with this. So if you ever reevaluate this piece, that's what I'd focus on.
This is a wonderfully original piece, though. And I really like the idea of foals getting cutie marks in their sleep; that some can't remember the dream is beautifully horrifying. I also think you did the ending really well, I love how it transitions into this peaceful image and doesn't leave us hanging nor try and be dramatic. It just is.
So overall? Other than the weird tone, this is a pretty cool story.
Ninja edit after Anon Y Mous's comment: it's not that I think you can't switch between tones, it's that the transitions felt abrupt and out of place in a piece this short. I actually also love the image of the dad picking him up like a football, but it just flipped a little to fast for me.
The tone kinda fluctuates between whimsical and serious in a weird way, though. That's really the only problem I have with this. So if you ever reevaluate this piece, that's what I'd focus on.
This is a wonderfully original piece, though. And I really like the idea of foals getting cutie marks in their sleep; that some can't remember the dream is beautifully horrifying. I also think you did the ending really well, I love how it transitions into this peaceful image and doesn't leave us hanging nor try and be dramatic. It just is.
So overall? Other than the weird tone, this is a pretty cool story.
Ninja edit after Anon Y Mous's comment: it's not that I think you can't switch between tones, it's that the transitions felt abrupt and out of place in a piece this short. I actually also love the image of the dad picking him up like a football, but it just flipped a little to fast for me.
Huh.
I mean, this is a pretty damn heavy topic, and you didn't do too bad at it, just... I don't know what to say. I guess I just would have liked more time with the character. Yeah. A happier ending would have been nice too, but I get why you did what you did. Just give us more time is my advice.
I mean, this is a pretty damn heavy topic, and you didn't do too bad at it, just... I don't know what to say. I guess I just would have liked more time with the character. Yeah. A happier ending would have been nice too, but I get why you did what you did. Just give us more time is my advice.
That's a worldbuilding and a half.
It was a little hard to figure out what was going on at first mostly because I kept getting caught up on the names. Not that there's anything wrong with them, they are appropriately ancient-being, but because I didn't really have enough time to get used to them. Discord also seems really, really spiteful, and I'm not sure what to make of that.
All around, I do really like this concept. And it really leaves me wondering how Discord went from a cosmic force to what he is now. You know, wondering in a good way. Also, I think you did a great job following the flow of cosmic battle in such a short time.
So, final verdict? Pretty good, but would definitely benefit from later expansion just to give us more time to get into the world.
It was a little hard to figure out what was going on at first mostly because I kept getting caught up on the names. Not that there's anything wrong with them, they are appropriately ancient-being, but because I didn't really have enough time to get used to them. Discord also seems really, really spiteful, and I'm not sure what to make of that.
All around, I do really like this concept. And it really leaves me wondering how Discord went from a cosmic force to what he is now. You know, wondering in a good way. Also, I think you did a great job following the flow of cosmic battle in such a short time.
So, final verdict? Pretty good, but would definitely benefit from later expansion just to give us more time to get into the world.
>>CoffeeMinion
Probably not for the writing, but hopefully for the art if something cool happens. Idk, I'll see what I can do in regards to words.
Probably not for the writing, but hopefully for the art if something cool happens. Idk, I'll see what I can do in regards to words.
I love the new prompt system. It's super cool and fancy and neato.
>>Moosetasm
You could actually do that before, it's just we never did.
>>Moosetasm
You could actually do that before, it's just we never did.
Welp, I was going to submit an art this round... then I left what I was drawing in somewhere not here, and I'm going out of state tomorrow regardless :/
Hopefully, others have been having a better time with their art than I have!
Hopefully, others have been having a better time with their art than I have!
That's a heck of a lotta kitties. I do find it interesting how paw-like the base of the chair legs are, or the face in the back of the chair. Any particular reason for using what looks like an Egyptian hairless cat on the left there?
Anyway, pretty neat piece here.
Anyway, pretty neat piece here.
Paging WIP