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All the Time in the World · FiM Short Story ·
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#1 · 2
· · >>Trick_Question
Art reviews commencing!

Though it seems that we have but a pair
Of drawings, yet do not despair.
Whatever their fettle,
They’ll both win a medal,
So compare without care, if you dare.


This is a cute commentary on the story. Ocelluna is well presented, from expressive face to accurate mark to unshorn fetlocks, all are handled with style. Nice hoofwork. Twilight is a bit rougher and it looks as if her mark wants to eat her butt. Background is almost nonexistent.The drawing is rather dark and I am guessing that you took a photo with your phone, Artist; if you don’t have access to a scanner, there are several document-scanning apps for smartphones that should do a better job of capturing your artwork in the future. I may post some links in Discord.

Regardless, your talent is evident and I am sure we will see more good work from you in the future. In other rounds, the unfinished nature of this work might count against you. At present, there is only one place this drawing can occupy on my slate. :) Good work, Artist!
#2 · 2
· · >>Rocket Lawn Chair
>>GroaningGreyAgony
I like to imagine Lunocellus with derp eyes based on the reflections. Sometimes you need some lingderp.
#3 · 2
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I like the sketch and the anatomy is otherwise gr8 except nightmare moon’s neck looks a bit too long.

Like GGA said above Twilight’s cutie mark is swallowing up her butt and the picture is too dark. Try to find a LIGHTER spot, huh? Won’t you?? Won’t YOU ANONYMOUS PERSON???? HMMMMMM?????
#4 · 1
· · >>BlueChameleonVI
>>Trick_Question
That's the first thing I noticed. Seems we've got a theme of wild eyes this round!

Another theme for the art seems to be rough sketches, which is understandable given the time frame.

This is another promising embryo of a drawing, artist! I especially love the form and proportion you've drawn for those pesky horse legs (which I can never seem to get right).

As of writing this, I unfortunately haven't read the fic yet, but this is making me want to read it. Lines look smooth and neat. Looks like you managed to get the form you wanted in only a few passes of the pencil, keeping your drawing clean and easy to understand.

Not much I can say outside what's already been mentioned. It looks fairly sparse, and I'm not too sure what's happening to Twicellus over there. Not sure why she's reacting to Lunocellus that way, which probably means I need to read the fic for more context. Overall, though, a great little sketch!
#5 · 2
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Fuzzy fetlocks fill my fetish
Ocellus obviously owns our overarching ovation
Twilight tries and tarries, trodden toward toil

Butts
#6 · 1
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It's a travesty that this didn't win.

Er, imagine I said that in a way that didn't insult the other art which was also good.