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Citrizen Pressed
With somewhat less than zesty appeal,
The citrus fruit slouched into the pub
And sourly requested a pint of bitters.
The citrus fruit slouched into the pub
And sourly requested a pint of bitters.

Another one that makes it seem like the breaks in form were deliberate to make a point. The first two lines have the same rhythm and syllable count, then the last one plows through all that with the "bitters" serving as a contrast to the prior citrus imagery as well as justifying the breakage of form. I like wordplay with "sourly" and "zesty," plus the pun title, but the "citrus" on the second line may be too on the nose.

>>Pascoite
This is another one where the 'Wait until 3 AM' strategy didn't quite produce something worth the candle. Thanks for the kind comment!
This is another one where the 'Wait until 3 AM' strategy didn't quite produce something worth the candle. Thanks for the kind comment!