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Different, yet Similar · Poetry Minific ·
Organised by Anon Y Mous
Word limit 15–1000
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Fire in the North
The sun is cold today
As smoke hazes down from the north.

The orange disc
ooooBelongs to the azimuth of a different plane
ooooOn the rock of some new star’s set
ooooHallowed as Burgon’s “minster fane”
ooooBy beings we forget.

Outside ourselves
ooooBeneath a white of geologic frame
ooooWhere not a cloud from ocean settled
ooooCan be discerned, perhaps are Cambrians to name,
ooooSave that our appointments make us nettled.

Circling in space
ooooRedundantly, as a Saturnian moon
ooooYou would not know it, if you saw
ooooExcept the pall that covers all of June
ooooWhose blue for us gives thought to law.
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Smash, again.
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This is really competent and looks cool. It doesn't roll off my tongue too well. It's topical right now but I'm not getting the feel of the prompt from this one.
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This is something really artsy, and I don't mean that in a pejorative way. Though maybe I do a little, mostly in that it does go for a whole lot of highbrow references that go over my head. I just barely know what a saturnian is. Similar with Cambrian, though I can't discern how it's being used here. Not the slightest clue what the line about Burgon means. Then even the lines where I know what the individual words mean, I don't get anything from their assemblage. Take the final line. That should be what drives home the point of the poem, and it sure sounds like it is, but I don't get it at all.

Very pretty, but ultimately, it didn't connect with me.
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Red Sky Penny
.....Eternally abides
.....As very far below
.....On flickering spheres we dance and die
.....A profuse cladistic show.