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I've Wasted All the Time I Can · Poetry Minific ·
Organised by Anon Y Mous
Word limit 15–1000
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Alone Myself Happy
All the time I play
These video games are my thing
Can't hurt me like people
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Is this a haiku? It roughly looks like one, but only the first line has the right number of syllables. The sentiment is nice, how the speaker takes refuge from the outside world in games, which is probably not an uncommon thing.
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I think this gets off to a good start. The problem line for me is "Can't hurt me like people". You must find the same equality for 'people' that you did for Time in the first two lines. Then you will have a bangin' haiku.