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Project Habakkuk
Pykrete
is
14% wood pulp
and
86% ice.
They almost built
a ship
from it
of quite
a massive size.
It
stops bullets
like concrete
and
I hope you realize
As strong and massive
as that ship would be
(A two million-square foot
floating city)
My love for you
is
Even Greater Still.
And
unlike pykrete,
I know for sure it will
not
ever
melt.
is
14% wood pulp
and
86% ice.
They almost built
a ship
from it
of quite
a massive size.
It
stops bullets
like concrete
and
I hope you realize
As strong and massive
as that ship would be
(A two million-square foot
floating city)
My love for you
is
Even Greater Still.
And
unlike pykrete,
I know for sure it will
not
ever
melt.
Free verse
is
14% word choice
and
86% rhythm.
Well, sort of.
You got it right
this work
it works
for me
and flows like the prompt.
The description
builds up to
a climax
and
I hope you realize
As slow and buoyant
as this shape might be
(A zero-foot
floating text?)
My like for it
is
Louder Than It Seems.
And
of some entries
(I'm only reviewing half)
it comes
three
out of
eight.
is
14% word choice
and
86% rhythm.
Well, sort of.
You got it right
this work
it works
for me
and flows like the prompt.
The description
builds up to
a climax
and
I hope you realize
As slow and buoyant
as this shape might be
(A zero-foot
floating text?)
My like for it
is
Louder Than It Seems.
And
of some entries
(I'm only reviewing half)
it comes
three
out of
eight.
This reminds me of that sonnet where Shakespeare says how ridiculous it is to compare people or abstract concepts to things, then illustrate by saying the lady's hair is like black wires sprouting from her head. I don't know if that's the angle you were taking on this, but it's reminiscent, by just choosing something oddball because it's not going to be an apt comparison in any case. I only know of Habakkuk as a minor prophet, so I don't know if I'm supposed to be getting something from that title. Or maybe that was the name of the actual shipbuilding project?
Normally, I don't get much of of free verse structure, as it just seems arbitrary, since the author's reasons for building it the way they did aren't going to be apparent or inferred by the reader. But I do think this one hits a nice rhythm.
I do wonder about the object of the speaker's affection, because that would add some context about how sincere he is. Like a middle-school student professing love to his first crush (what are the chances that'll last) versus someone saying it to a long-time spouse, or a respected master, or a deity or something. It's nice that it works on both levels, that the speaker is accurate in what they say, or that they're ironically and naively making a claim they can't back up.
Normally, I don't get much of of free verse structure, as it just seems arbitrary, since the author's reasons for building it the way they did aren't going to be apparent or inferred by the reader. But I do think this one hits a nice rhythm.
I do wonder about the object of the speaker's affection, because that would add some context about how sincere he is. Like a middle-school student professing love to his first crush (what are the chances that'll last) versus someone saying it to a long-time spouse, or a respected master, or a deity or something. It's nice that it works on both levels, that the speaker is accurate in what they say, or that they're ironically and naively making a claim they can't back up.
Operation Mincemeat
was the audacious plan
to plant "official" documents
upon a "drowned" man
and float him to the Spanish coast
where German spies could pry,
and keep the Nazis soundly fooled
right out through next July.
And so ideas not complete
in one time-pressured round,
may be brought out and dressed again
to find more fruitful ground.
was the audacious plan
to plant "official" documents
upon a "drowned" man
and float him to the Spanish coast
where German spies could pry,
and keep the Nazis soundly fooled
right out through next July.
And so ideas not complete
in one time-pressured round,
may be brought out and dressed again
to find more fruitful ground.
>>Light_Striker
Glad you enjoyed
>>Pascoite Honestly, I mostly just wanted to write about how badass pykrete is. And yes, Project Habakkuk is what the shipbuilding project was called. They never built more than a 70-foot long proof of concept on a lake in Canada, but even that still took three years to melt completely.
>>GroaningGreyAgony
Yeah, WWII was filled with crazy schemes. Of course, the craziest of them all ended up taking a major part in finally ending it. (The USSR invading Manchuria was the other big motivation)
Glad you enjoyed
>>Pascoite Honestly, I mostly just wanted to write about how badass pykrete is. And yes, Project Habakkuk is what the shipbuilding project was called. They never built more than a 70-foot long proof of concept on a lake in Canada, but even that still took three years to melt completely.
>>GroaningGreyAgony
Yeah, WWII was filled with crazy schemes. Of course, the craziest of them all ended up taking a major part in finally ending it. (The USSR invading Manchuria was the other big motivation)