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It Could Have Gone Better · FiM Minific ·
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an alchemist and his boy
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#1 · 1
· · >>Bachiavellian
I hate to say this, but they look like they’re eating at a restaurant and that they’re annoyed at how loud the people behind them are.

Maybe sweat drops? Or angle the eyebrows down on the sides? They really should look terrified.
#2 ·
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Agreeing with >>Moosetasm that their expressions don't quite match the tone of the scene in the story. I'll also note that Mr. Lefty seems to have a lot more detail to his face than Sir Righty. For both of them, though, it's hard to tell where their shoulders/legs are, since the robes look a little blobby to me. I really like you sneaking in Discord's claw, though. That's a great touch!
#3 ·
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“Well, don’t just sit there, boy. You punched that hole in the ceiling; you fix it.”

Another piece that lacks too much detail to tell a real story. We can barely tell where the characters are, and their expressions can convey any number of things.