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Beatitudes · Poetry Short Short ·
Organised by Anon Y Mous
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A Ballade of Twitching Whiskers
Exhausting? Yes! In every single way,
The world's expansive dangers take a toll.
With teeth and poison, watch them seek to slay,
Destroy, dissolve the body, brain, and soul.
But squirrels know! We make our mark, enroll
The trees themselves, pervade the very air!
Disrupting plans remains our highest goal,
Embracing panic, taut, alive, aware!

It's not enough our enemies display
A greater size, intelligence, control:
Communication always rules the day
When human creatures want to grab the whole
Surrounding country, crushing mouse and vole.
Ignore their blockage! Match them glare for glare!
Deploy your instincts! Scamper up the pole
Embracing panic, taut, alive, aware!

Conceited humans want to go astray,
Despise the thought we share a common bowl,
Divine and blest. Incensed, they stomp and say,
"It's ours alone! We'll hand around a dole!"
Reminders serve to bludgeon, nudge, cajole
As furry bodies swarm to spark and flare
Electric shorts. We darken light they stole,
Embracing panic, taut, alive, aware!

Our deadly rampage strikes! They think it droll,
Dismiss our efforts, make a quick repair.
We swarm again to flood their snobby shoal,
Embracing panic, taut, alive, aware!
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· · >>Baal Bunny
Narratively, I'd like to see the people's reaction to the squirrels' rampage. It would have the makings of a mini-epic, a kind of skiourosmyomachy; besides, I'd hardly find it droll if I learned my neighbors were chewing up my wires, and I know a few folks who would get their bb guns ready.
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· · >>Baal Bunny
I'm not sure whether this is serious about squirrels banding together to attack humans or tongue-in-cheek about how they often fry themselves on electrical lines. Either way, the rhyme and meter are constructed very well, the only minor thing being that "squirrel" can be heard as either one or two syllables. Might one of these squirrels possibly be a sorceress? :-)
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>>Heavy_Mole
>>Pascoite

Thanks, folks!

The idea here is that squirrels--yeah, I prefer it as one syllable, but the dictionaries disagree--have been purposefully attacking power lines all this time--the phenomenon even has its own Wikipedia page! But we humans keep thinking it's accidental. Because that's how we humans think.

Mike