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The rhyme and rhythm schemes here are pretty cool. A little of the rhythm is forced, but not much, and the only rhyme that feels weak is in/been. (In particular, I often try to avoid rhymes (or rhythms, for that matter) that don't work in both British and American English).
I liked the theme at the beginning of the poem, but as it went on, I lost my sense of what it was about. By the end, I no longer could follow what it was saying. The penultimate stanza did pop back up for me as something I got, but then the finale lapsed into a head-scratcher again.
Overall, a pleasant read, but a bit over my head. Unless the end is deliberately nonsense, saying that when you break out of your rut, you regaining your liveliness?
I liked the theme at the beginning of the poem, but as it went on, I lost my sense of what it was about. By the end, I no longer could follow what it was saying. The penultimate stanza did pop back up for me as something I got, but then the finale lapsed into a head-scratcher again.
Overall, a pleasant read, but a bit over my head. Unless the end is deliberately nonsense, saying that when you break out of your rut, you regaining your liveliness?
This poem reminds me of those memes that go in a circle. Problem, solution, another problem, another solution that leads to the first problem.