Hey! It looks like you're new here. You might want to check out the introduction.

And Only Bare Bones Remain · Poetry Short Short ·
Organised by Anon Y Mous
Word limit 100–2000
Show rules for this event
#1 ·
·
Hokay, I am in.
#2 ·
· on The Mockery of Intent
The rhymes are all clean, yet the rhythm gets wonky in places. Though the poem itself lampshades that, saying how the thoughts the poet wants to get on the page get mangled a bit by the constraints of fitting them into the poem's structure, which was a clever thing to do. I certainly have had this thought before, that any sort of structured poetry is difficult to write, since you're constantly fighting the structure to get the story told and do it without the language sounding too unnatural. This is kind of a poem for poets.
#3 ·
· on Haven't Got Halloween Out of My System Yet
I have no idea what "aliment got switched" means, so I'm already off on the wrong foot as to why the narrator has had to kill this woman, but that prompts him to go on a killing spree, then oh crap, she's actually not dead, so he just repurposes it all as Halloween decorations? That's the gist of it I'm getting. There's an approximate rhythm, and a number of the rhymes are stretches, working better when spoken than read. Pretty amusing.
#4 ·
· on Thankful for Your Hands
There's a nice sentiment here. The first two stanzas seem to set up what will be a thematic repetition but it doesn't continue. And the second also seems to set up a rhyme scheme that doesn't continue, so be wary of creating expectations like that. I think the idea is that the narrator's mother taught him to do things for himself, so that later on, when he's married, he's carried hat philosophy on and is doing everything he can for his spouse. That's the nice way of interpreting it. The bad way is that the honey-bun is his mother. The even worse way (and the only sense I can make of the last line) is that this is a Psycho situation.
#5 ·
·
BLARG...