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I couldn't tell who was narrating throughout most of it. The irreverent tone made it seem like it was Rainbow Dash, but the verbose vocabulary suggested Rarity. Either way, like the others are saying, this just seemed too random and incoherent to really be all that enjoyable.
Very amusing romp. As someone who ordinarily hates non-mane six and OCs, you managed to endear me to both in only a few hundred words with some snappy, well-written dialogue. Kudos.
I can't tell if you're actually aiming for a sentimental ending, or if it's sarcastic. I mean, the premise is really bonkers, and you don't have that much room to really make the audience take it seriously.
Still, an inventive idea. Just that if the idea was to tug at our heartstrings at the end, it feels unearned.
Still, an inventive idea. Just that if the idea was to tug at our heartstrings at the end, it feels unearned.
As someone who struggles with description and leans heavily toward dialogue, I can understand the temptation of a dialogue-only story. However, it really messes with the pacing. You've got a decent rapport between Luna and Celestia, but it all just moves too fast, nothing's given room to breathe since there's no bodily or facial reaction to compliment the dialogue.
Enjoyable, no complaints. Also, 'Blueblood is a twat' is a theme that has shown up in two of the stories I've read. I guess some people find more story potential out of him than I do, XD
Very pretty, but ultimately bland.
Sounds like an ideal girl AMIRITE BOIIIIIIS?
(I'm tired, I'm sorry)
Sounds like an ideal girl AMIRITE BOIIIIIIS?
(I'm tired, I'm sorry)