Thanks for the reviews, I appreciate it.

>>Pascoite

it's very easy to ascribe a lot more intent to it than the author ever had

I like that about more abstract art, it's really in the eye of the beholder. It's a nice interpretation you've got.

>>Light_Striker
>>Bachiavellian
>>GroaningGreyAgony

I had a theme in mind when writing. Death of the author & all that, but if you're interested, the rain is a metaphor.

Thanks for the reviews. Didn't expect this one to do well, just needed to get the gimmick out of my head. I'd love to see a serious poem with this format, but it's really friggin hard to write like this (especially editing).

Like this one. Reminded me of this one by Bo Burnham. Not in subject matter, but the way the narrator distances themselves from something they really care about.

>>Trick_Question
Someone please explain what Ot means. I never learned, and I've been afraid of asking.

So yeah, Sentinel is my story. Consensus seems to be the writing is all right, but that there's no tension (which I agree with).

I planned on giving a reason for the guardian being there, something like the grave he guards being that of a close friend or family member. I also thought about giving him an internal conflict of wanting to die but being unable. But it was late and I was tired so I went to bed instead :P

Thanks for the reviews, and good luck with the final to those of you still in the game.

ps. For those of you with weak google-fu, Anapa is the Egyptian vocalisation of ı͗npw, the name of Anubis.

>>RawCringe >>JudgeDeadd >>Not_A_Hat >>Monokeras >>Monokeras >>Shadowed_Song >>AndrewRogue >>FrontSevens

I like it, then again I am a fan of this kind of fiction. The technobabble wasn't that bad, imo.

The twist in the intro is pretty clever, didn't see it coming. Well written, but not much story.

Hm. I'm not entirely sure what it is about yet, but it does seem to hint at some good stuff. I like it, but will have to come back later.

Not a story, feels like the author venting. I wasn't hooked at all, and besides, this kind of thinking comes across as pretty ridiculous to me, so not a big fan of this one.

Too bad it wasn't finished. I liked the lore in the beginning - wasn't very interested in the climbing man, however. If you ever revisit this, I say write more about the fairies.

the Castle in the Clouds is where you can catch a fairy of your very own

And then you go on to say you have to be invited to even get there.

edit: If the stuff about fairies didn't really matter and the whole point was the ending, that's pretty clever, but not really a story and a bit too meta.

I don't understand what you're going for here. The first paragraph and last two lines feel out of place, and there's some spelling/grammatical/formatting errors.

I don't understand the point of this, and I can't tell if it's because I have misconceptions about how the American political system works or if it's just plain weird.

>>Baal Bunny

Or perhaps a spectral phantom

Before I knew spectral could also mean ghost-like, I used the alias Spectral Shade - "colourful shadow" (edgy, right?). Of course, it could also mean "Ghostly Ghost".

I'd like to, but I can't spare three whole days; uni is keeping me busy. Good luck to everyone participating!

>>RogerDodger
I was confused by this, too, until I realised. Maybe hide the thumbs until voting begins?

>>Spectral
Forgot to mention: this is a step in the right direction, of course. Expecting people to sign up for fimfic accounts for general fiction contests is dumb.

Tbh, I think this is way too barebones at the moment. No notifications, no pages, no avatars, no way of finding replies to a comment, finding out which comment someone is replying to makes you lose track of the comment you were reading. Also no avatars, no emoticons, and no "alias pages" - I'd love to find my way back to people's fimfiction pages from here - perhaps by letting every alias include a link. Also no comment preview.

Images maybe work? Testing below:
[img]http://www.animalsbase.com/wp-content/uploads/2015/06/Pony.jpg[/img]
Nope.
Can I edit a comment? Yepp.