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Crunch, Crunch, Crunch · Poetry Minific ·
Organised by Anon Y Mous
Word limit 15–1000
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Untrickled Treats
When you have a bunch
Of candy bars, you munch.
Days after Halloween
They will be your lunch,
Or ruining your brunch.
Though you are no longer keen,
I have got a hunch
Your paunch will feel the punch.
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I like the idea of guilty gorging on Halloween candy after the day, and most of the poem spoke to that fine, but the "no longer keen" felt wedged in. I didn't get what that line was saying. Rhymes all work fine, but there's no meter, if one was intended. Cute enough for a quick read.
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I like the contrast of the phonemes '-unch' and '-een' in this poem, and it concludes with an energetic type of alliteration.