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The Hubble Constant
Expanding, reaching, stretching outward bound,
Engulf the limits! Grow yourself within!
An ordinary truth but still profound:
As space between us spreads, our lives begin!
Divided early, some are masculine,
Assigned to bear the traits that fought and frowned
With blazing stories stuffed to fill their skin,
Expanding, reaching, stretching outward bound.
The second group is fed another sound;
To sit and stay, they're told, is feminine.
But time continues, raises spirits downed.
Engulf the limits! Grow yourself within!
Humanity's a swirl of yang and yin,
A constant change uniting sky and ground.
Our separations show the ways we're kin,
An ordinary truth but still profound.
The universe as well expands around,
Increasing distance, thick becoming thin.
Evolving social norms should not astound:
As space between us spreads, our lives begin!
We're born to motion, smash and crash and din,
To move apart, but distance hasn't drowned
Our deep connections. Holler, wave, and grin;
I'll holler back. Resilient? We're renowned,
Expanding, reaching...
Engulf the limits! Grow yourself within!
An ordinary truth but still profound:
As space between us spreads, our lives begin!
Divided early, some are masculine,
Assigned to bear the traits that fought and frowned
With blazing stories stuffed to fill their skin,
Expanding, reaching, stretching outward bound.
The second group is fed another sound;
To sit and stay, they're told, is feminine.
But time continues, raises spirits downed.
Engulf the limits! Grow yourself within!
Humanity's a swirl of yang and yin,
A constant change uniting sky and ground.
Our separations show the ways we're kin,
An ordinary truth but still profound.
The universe as well expands around,
Increasing distance, thick becoming thin.
Evolving social norms should not astound:
As space between us spreads, our lives begin!
We're born to motion, smash and crash and din,
To move apart, but distance hasn't drowned
Our deep connections. Holler, wave, and grin;
I'll holler back. Resilient? We're renowned,
Expanding, reaching...
Hm, I like this. The rhyme and meter are both very clean, and the way the subsequent stanzas borrow consecutive lines from the first is a nice effect. Kind of like a pantoum, in a way, for how they change their meaning by being used in a new context. Most of it seems to talk to tolerance of gender identity, but the last one feels more like being kind in general. I could still buy it being a consequence of that, though, in that the former is an element of the latter. Nicely done.
>>Pascoite
Thanks, Pasco:
And thanks, everyone who voted. The form's called a rondeau redouble', and it's become one of my favorites the past couple years. The prompt got me thinking about the expansion of the universe and from there to Dr. Martin Luther King's line about how “the arc of the moral universe is long, but it bends toward justice.” There are some things we maybe don't want to go back to, and with the universe expanding, here's hoping we can all keep expanding as well. :)
Mike
Thanks, Pasco:
And thanks, everyone who voted. The form's called a rondeau redouble', and it's become one of my favorites the past couple years. The prompt got me thinking about the expansion of the universe and from there to Dr. Martin Luther King's line about how “the arc of the moral universe is long, but it bends toward justice.” There are some things we maybe don't want to go back to, and with the universe expanding, here's hoping we can all keep expanding as well. :)
Mike