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Subredeemer
How far must one fall
To raise up all?
The divine sparks,
Warped, blunted, shuttered, blinded
in prisons of mere flesh,
Cried out in lust, agony,
Torment and revolt,
Shouted for redemption
Even as they fell into the abyss.
So many roasted coals below,
So few sparks ascending to the sky.
When the Word descended and became Flesh as well
Each spark had their part within the grand story,
Redeemer, Hero, Defender, Rock,
Gathered to inspire the living.
But so many dead lay far below,
Smoldering in the embers,
Whoever could reach them?
So one of the holy twelve
Took the money and the mortal sin,
Accepted the part of Betrayer
And descended still further
To reach those mired in the toils of hell,
To cure the sickened of soul
And raise the dead of hope
So at the first Harrowing, and each thereafter,
More and more did the sparks fly upward,
Borne to reconciliation and peace.
To raise up all?
The divine sparks,
Warped, blunted, shuttered, blinded
in prisons of mere flesh,
Cried out in lust, agony,
Torment and revolt,
Shouted for redemption
Even as they fell into the abyss.
So many roasted coals below,
So few sparks ascending to the sky.
When the Word descended and became Flesh as well
Each spark had their part within the grand story,
Redeemer, Hero, Defender, Rock,
Gathered to inspire the living.
But so many dead lay far below,
Smoldering in the embers,
Whoever could reach them?
So one of the holy twelve
Took the money and the mortal sin,
Accepted the part of Betrayer
And descended still further
To reach those mired in the toils of hell,
To cure the sickened of soul
And raise the dead of hope
So at the first Harrowing, and each thereafter,
More and more did the sparks fly upward,
Borne to reconciliation and peace.
I like the tone of this one, and I'm going to venture a guess that it's aligned with a theory that Judas was part of an organization that was trying to spur change, and so wasn't acting as a betrayer, but as someone who felt like he needed to be the charge that would set things in motion to achieve the desired end. Either way, it does take a sympathetic view of him (and to be sure, even if he had malicious intent, it was still the way things were supposed to go).
The imagery and word choice here create an interesting effect, where they're about tumultuous things, but still have a smoother, gentler feel to them. I don't know that there's any sort of formal structure, so I'm treating it more as free verse. This was an enjoyable read.
The imagery and word choice here create an interesting effect, where they're about tumultuous things, but still have a smoother, gentler feel to them. I don't know that there's any sort of formal structure, so I'm treating it more as free verse. This was an enjoyable read.