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Cold Water · Poetry Minific ·
Organised by Anon Y Mous
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I drink a lot of water.
Like, probably several gallons a day. About three if my math is right.
Straight from the tap, too, which freaks some people out.

And I mean, I'm glad I drink lots of water. Most people have the opposite problem.
But
It isn't out of some noble health goal or anything.
I'm just always thirsty.
And the thing is
I'm also obese,
So this could actually be a sign of prediabetes.

I've lost some weight this year, which is good,
because diabetes can kill you.
My mom's prediabetic,
And her mom died from diabetes,
So I know it runs in the family.
And I'm terrified of death.
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· · >>Super_Trampoline
I drink tap water as well.

This is another one that's a bit biographical without giving me that much of a broader view of the speaker. I think the shaved ice one was more successful at it. This is closer to the Kissinger one for me.

I think it's that the fear of death comes in at the end, and then it's stated so matter-of-factly that it's not explored, so the poem's really focused on water consumption. A little more at the end would sell it better.
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· · >>Super_Trampoline
Author, if this is autobiographical, there's hope. I've been to the brink of the abyss and pulled back. PM me if you want to talk.
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>>Pascoite
Now you know why I'm always carrying a water bottle around at pony conventions you see me at.

>>GroaningGreyAgony
Thanks. I don't think I'm actually prediabetic, but I certainly do need to lose more weight still. And I'm super glad you're doing better now!