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We Sink, We Rise
I lie upon my side down on the sands
And face the rolling waves that curl and sprawl,
And from my new perspective on the strands,
I suddenly perceive the vast blue wall
Of water that is nestled with the lands
And clings about our grand terrestrial ball
Impossibly adhered in azure bands
Upon a globe that sails too fast to fall
Into the sun. And like the waters, I
Am stuck upon its side, and dizzy not
With all the cosmic spinning but with thought.
The rushing deeps so far have left me dry,
But water of my body once did ride,
And will again, within the ocean's tide.
And face the rolling waves that curl and sprawl,
And from my new perspective on the strands,
I suddenly perceive the vast blue wall
Of water that is nestled with the lands
And clings about our grand terrestrial ball
Impossibly adhered in azure bands
Upon a globe that sails too fast to fall
Into the sun. And like the waters, I
Am stuck upon its side, and dizzy not
With all the cosmic spinning but with thought.
The rushing deeps so far have left me dry,
But water of my body once did ride,
And will again, within the ocean's tide.
Boy, it's been a hot minute since I've read an Italian sonnet. Or been to the beach for that matter. I live near the beach, after Covid I should try to go more often.
Anyway, other than the hella awkward overhanging transition sentence, a nice little poem.
Anyway, other than the hella awkward overhanging transition sentence, a nice little poem.
Nice sonnet, and only a couple of semi-forced stresses. I like the theme that all that makes you up has been here a long time and will be a long time after. I've heard it expressed another way, that there's a decent chance some of the atoms that make you up once belonged to someone famous. I also like it when metered poetry doesn't feel obligated to put the rhymes in natural pausing places in the sentences. I enjoyed this one.
The surging coils of the great blue deeps
Entwine the world with life and lend their power
To mighty storms, destructive in their sweeps
And flooding waves that rise, the lands to scour.
Yet how more terrible we are, who tower
Over beasts, and rend atomic keeps;
How fearsome we shall be in our great hour!
Entwine the world with life and lend their power
To mighty storms, destructive in their sweeps
And flooding waves that rise, the lands to scour.
Yet how more terrible we are, who tower
Over beasts, and rend atomic keeps;
How fearsome we shall be in our great hour!