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I Did My Best · Original Short Story ·
Organised by RogerDodger
Word limit 2000–8000
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He’s on an Adventure!
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The ghost of a prior attempt lurks in the background of this piece. Judged by the merits of its lines alone, we have a delightful little sketch of an insect adventurer, cloaked in a sub-shop coupon, bearing its weapon aloft and highlighted by the setting sun. While I have to subtract a bit on presentation grounds, the cleverness and character of the piece excuse its peccadilloes. This will go in my upper tier.
#2 ·
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On the one hand, I like the execution of the piece itself, minus the sloppily erased lines, but I feel like it's too concrete to leave that much to the writer's imagination. Just looking at it once I can picture a dopey protagonist (who's also an ant) who might be ditzy but really wants to do good, or something like that.

An ant who fancies himself a knight. A neat concept, but now I have little desire to see it in written form.
#3 ·
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I think this image could be improved with a little more consideration given to proportion. Miller Minus hot tip! Ants are small.

The coupon being used as a cape would be too large, and even putting that aside, it's hard to picture the angle of the "camera" given the skyline looks basically exactly how it looks to people our size (so... us).

But still, very imaginative, and I'm not surprised it sparked a couple of stories. Thanks for submitting!