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Identical? Never! I'll strongly deny
There's any resemblance between you and I!
For once in our lifetime, I have to agree
Since I know the phrase is "between you and me."
You're bloated and gassy, your helium core
Engorging grotesquely as never before!
We're both of us growing, our hydrogen shot.
Acceptance is better than weeping and snot.
It's lies! Propaganda! We're sprightly and young!
A million? A billion? Just words on the tongue!
Our planets are cinders, our cluster's advance
Proceeding apace through the stellar expanse.
These others are stodgy! They never respond,
Ignoring my comments! I'm not demimonde!
Flamboyance confuses them, destined to fade
To sputtering sparks in the cosmic parade.
They're petty and jealous! The brighter I shine,
The meaner the gossip, the snider the whine!
We'll make an impression when both of us go
While they'll be forgotten, reflecting our glow.
We're going? I hadn't expected to move.
And packing is awkward: I might disapprove...
It's natural, sister, a fitting demise
To stars of out talent, ambition, and size.
Demise? You mean death? I'm not ready! I've still
Effusive arrangements and goals to fulfill!
Finale and curtain: we'll give them an act
To light up the heavens! We'll never contract!
I don't understand, but you've always been smart,
Supplying the wits while I handle the art...
Our novae will blossom and capture the stage,
Unrivaled by anything else in this age!
I trust you. I'm sorry I argued and spat.
We've always been sisters, and that will be that.
Together again as we truly should be.
You ready? A-one and a-two and a-three!
There's any resemblance between you and I!
For once in our lifetime, I have to agree
Since I know the phrase is "between you and me."
You're bloated and gassy, your helium core
Engorging grotesquely as never before!
We're both of us growing, our hydrogen shot.
Acceptance is better than weeping and snot.
It's lies! Propaganda! We're sprightly and young!
A million? A billion? Just words on the tongue!
Our planets are cinders, our cluster's advance
Proceeding apace through the stellar expanse.
These others are stodgy! They never respond,
Ignoring my comments! I'm not demimonde!
Flamboyance confuses them, destined to fade
To sputtering sparks in the cosmic parade.
They're petty and jealous! The brighter I shine,
The meaner the gossip, the snider the whine!
We'll make an impression when both of us go
While they'll be forgotten, reflecting our glow.
We're going? I hadn't expected to move.
And packing is awkward: I might disapprove...
It's natural, sister, a fitting demise
To stars of out talent, ambition, and size.
Demise? You mean death? I'm not ready! I've still
Effusive arrangements and goals to fulfill!
Finale and curtain: we'll give them an act
To light up the heavens! We'll never contract!
I don't understand, but you've always been smart,
Supplying the wits while I handle the art...
Our novae will blossom and capture the stage,
Unrivaled by anything else in this age!
I trust you. I'm sorry I argued and spat.
We've always been sisters, and that will be that.
Together again as we truly should be.
You ready? A-one and a-two and a-three!
There's only a mild emotional journey here, but for what it is, it's cute, and I can't find any faults in the structure. The star in denial seems easy to convince, but unless you let the poem go on for a few thousand words, there's probably nothing else you could do. Yet on top of that, it has a comical air to it, so it was never really about getting emotionally engaged with the characters anyway.
Whimsy again!
I could do with a bit more, though--scene-setting stuff like what the blackness of space looks like when you're a star and character stuff like what it feels like to expand till you destroy the planets you once protected. Keep that stuff as light as what's here, and you'll be set.
Mike
I could do with a bit more, though--scene-setting stuff like what the blackness of space looks like when you're a star and character stuff like what it feels like to expand till you destroy the planets you once protected. Keep that stuff as light as what's here, and you'll be set.
Mike