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Old-Fashioned Yuletide Pie
Ulterior motives? I wouldn't! I think
Despicable anyone trying to fool!
The truth is a tonic, the healthiest drink:
Avoiding it opens a path to misrule!
I've spent the semester in beatings at school
By classmates for airing their fraudulent stink.
My efforts at honesty bloodied my stool.
Ulterior motives? I wouldn't! I think...
Revenge for my treatment? Perhaps it's a chink
In armor that's otherwise polished and cool.
But liars deserve to be thrown in the clink,
Despicable anyone trying to fool!
Preparing the pie, I consulted a ghoul
Acquaintance who gave me a mixture of skink
And wolfsbane. I called it "a taste of old Yule."
The truth is a tonic, the healthiest drink.
For wintery sacrifice offers a link
Historic and accurate. None but a mule
Denies it, recounted on paper with ink.
Avoiding it opens a path to misrule.
In candor, I told them the pie was a tool
Appeasing the spirits. They spared it a blink,
Then gobbled the stuff till they started to drool,
Collapsing. I'd never connivingly slink!
Ulterior motives...
Despicable anyone trying to fool!
The truth is a tonic, the healthiest drink:
Avoiding it opens a path to misrule!
I've spent the semester in beatings at school
By classmates for airing their fraudulent stink.
My efforts at honesty bloodied my stool.
Ulterior motives? I wouldn't! I think...
Revenge for my treatment? Perhaps it's a chink
In armor that's otherwise polished and cool.
But liars deserve to be thrown in the clink,
Despicable anyone trying to fool!
Preparing the pie, I consulted a ghoul
Acquaintance who gave me a mixture of skink
And wolfsbane. I called it "a taste of old Yule."
The truth is a tonic, the healthiest drink.
For wintery sacrifice offers a link
Historic and accurate. None but a mule
Denies it, recounted on paper with ink.
Avoiding it opens a path to misrule.
In candor, I told them the pie was a tool
Appeasing the spirits. They spared it a blink,
Then gobbled the stuff till they started to drool,
Collapsing. I'd never connivingly slink!
Ulterior motives...
Well, this was really good. One of those forms that makes you recycle lines, though I don't recognize the particular form. The rhymes and meter are all good. I think the message is rant against people who aren't truthful, and it must be referring to some very important truths since it's worth it to the speaker to poison them. The tone of the poem directly follows from the prompt's continuation. Well done.
>>Pascoite
Thanks, Pasco:
The form's a rondeau redouble', and I was aiming for one of those Edgar Allan Poe "crazy narrator" characters. :)
Mike
Thanks, Pasco:
The form's a rondeau redouble', and I was aiming for one of those Edgar Allan Poe "crazy narrator" characters. :)
Mike