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I Alone Recall What Was · Poetry Minific ·
Organised by Anon Y Mous
Word limit 15–1000
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Butterfly I Butterfly
the ball's potential
to endless hunger's dull chains
escape shell's ruin

the world ignores me
butterfly I butterfly
the world celebrates

not for long it does
fair seasons still age me fast
contently I fade
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To be one bee,
Hive's chaos sweeps and stuns you;
Still, honey results.
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I'm a little confused about what this means, but the title alone suggests it's about a butterfly emerging from its cocoon and only having a short life as something beautiful. The last two stanzas sit easily with that idea, but the first is a lot harder to understand in that mold, and since it's what you're leading off with, that's what's setting the initial tone. Other than that, it's a nice message. Structurally, it adheres to haiku structure well (syllable count anyway, I've never gotten into some of the slight differences that those in the know will tell you makes it another form).