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Sorry, I have very limited ability to type right now, so I'll have to keep it short.
Not any meter, though the structure kinda suggests there will be. Rhymes are mostly good, but a few stretches.
The title suggests this is a drug trip, but I wouldn't have gotten that from the poem itself. Some of the word choices seem odd, like they're filler. Like saying the lady with the hips, which seems self-explanatory and didn't refer to any sort of point or imagery. Creates a mood alright.
Not any meter, though the structure kinda suggests there will be. Rhymes are mostly good, but a few stretches.
The title suggests this is a drug trip, but I wouldn't have gotten that from the poem itself. Some of the word choices seem odd, like they're filler. Like saying the lady with the hips, which seems self-explanatory and didn't refer to any sort of point or imagery. Creates a mood alright.
I really like the wordplay here, but it's sharper in some places, where a stanza's ending line outright rhymes instead of just coming close. I also don't get a few of the jokes, but they may just be expressions I haven't heard before. Fun piece that seems to be saying that not everything you try to write works, you still enjoy the effort.
