>>Haze
>>SPark
>>Astrarian
>>HorseVoice
>>Not_A_Hat
>>FanOfMostEverything
>>JudgeDeadd
>>Xepher
>>Posh
>>GroaningGreyAgony
>>CoffeeMinion
>>AndrewRogue
>>Ranmilia

Thanks for all the comments and feedback everyone. Ok, so retrospective time.

This was an idea I had after an older write-off (forgot which one exactly) in true testament to only having the good ideas the day after. As a result, it has lived in my head for a while and has gone through several iterations of how to execute the core idea, which in part led to a bit of disjointedness, most notably the random TV at the end I didn't have time to introduce at the beginning. I knew that was a bit of an issue when I finished, but given that it was late at night at the time and I had no ideas how to fix it I hoped that the randomness of the rest of the piece covered for its sudden appearance.

For feedback about the underlining/other small specific things:
>>Xepher
Only the actual changing of a word is underlined. After that, the alteration is now "normal" in the scene, and as such characters react to it (as opposed to ordinary Mad Libs where they have to pretty much keep the words in a box- when doing a random noun they couldn't later describe it by other wider nouns, such as an instrument, or use the specific properties of whatever is conjured, i.e. the rattling Twilight hears)
>>Haze
Yeah, in retrospect I agree. It was underlined because it was meant to be the pony they end up ultimately giving Discord to use.
>>Xepher
The point of this was to be Twilight's blurting a stream of consciousness and then a deadpan realization. I don't think I got the tone across properly though, so I'll have to fix that if it survives with the changes to the ending I'm planning.

Now then, the two most common criticisms seem to be the beginning and the end. The beginning I'll have to tune up- redoing the start off and either expanding or cutting the explanation of the game seems to be in order. As for the end, continuing the gimmick seems like a good idea. The main reason it got cut was because of how the game was working in the TV iteration. Kinda starting to regret that one, but they needed a way to watch, and something out of place does seem like the best match for Discord.

Finally, this is my story I liked the best so far, and the first one where I think I've gotten good enough to actually polish it up and post it on Fimfiction. Although that probably won't be for a while, seeing as I want to expand it a significantly, really only have time on weekends, and have to figure out how to get (a) proofreader(s) as well.

Well, I submitted something. It's not as polished as I would've liked, but the change in time means I won't be up in the morning to fix it up like when the time limit was at 1/2 EST depending on daylight savings (or was that the short story rounds... in which case I remember the other kind of round being 11/12, which also would be better).

I finally started making good progress on writing outside of these since the last time I entered, and was hoping to have a finished version of Discord Libs up on fimfic, or at least ready for prereading. But then I got sick and lost all momentum. Oh well, hoping to use this writeoff to get back on the pony. Hopefully by the anniversary of the writeoff it was in it'll be ready, which is in... one month. Holy. I thought I was at 9 months, not 11.

Well I finished and submitted (save any last minute fixes/edits). Probably should've gone with my other idea and saved this one for a short story round, it wound up being much too long and I could've easily added more. I think it may have some pacing issues now, but oh well.

Wow, a lot of 750/700-749 fics this time. Also, isn't there usually ~100 for a minific contest?

Darn, up too late to make a few last fiddly adjustments I thought of overnight. Oh well.

Also, only 27 fics for a MLP minific round? What happened?