Wow. Got one in. Incredible! I didn't think I was still able to write about ponies… and in English at that!
Good luck to everyone!

Hey!
Grats to the medalists and all entrants alike. Great job, mates! :)

>>Haze
>>Rao
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>>Winston
>>Not_A_Hat

I love you guys! I know this piece had many flaws. It was written on the back of an envelope in a couple of hours, so I wasn’t expecting it to make finals at all, especially given the lukewarm reviews it got. This was a big 'n wonderful surprise! I was, however, convinced from the get-go it would then finish last of the pack (which it did). But I was thrilled to see that short scene being bagged together with the entries of the WriteOff’s greatest writers.

Frankly, the goal here was more to get myself back to writing in English after a long hiatus, because, you know, life has been hectic since my return from the South pole. I‘m super chuffed the English was up to scratch and no one noticed it was written by a non-native guy. That’s awesomely cool.

I can't promise I’ll take part in another event very soon, but at least I’ll do my best to try and rustle up something during an upcoming minific round.

Once again, hail to the winners and ❤️ to all!

I can't believe this website is still alive and the same cuckoos are haunting it (as we say in Switzerland!) :P
Ooh there's even a picture competition now?

Well, I’m a bit sorry but I found this one rather bland. Well, actually not bland, but not sufficiently original enough to catch my attention. It reads fairly smoothly, but I really failed to get involved emotionally with the characters, so I was left out-of-touch and uncaring. It’s not bad, but it’s not pony-centric (I mean, this could happen IRL) and the slight veneer of pathos didn’t really do much for me. To use another metaphor, I felt was you can feel when you walk by a church while the funeral of someone you don’t know takes place: you feel slightly touched, but that’s about all.

Sorry if I sound tone-deaf here.

Wow. The first description was pretty nice but heavy-handed. Both pleasant in a very short space, and I really hate Despite this fact which sounds awkward to me. Why not though, like in: …for two ponies to spread out, though the earth pony and unicorn mares… It makes the sentence a bit of a run-on, but I think it still sounds better than ‘Despite…’

‘Turn out’ should be ‘turnout’, as far as I know. Some typos here and there, such as: “I thought I knew what I as getting into”.

So this is loaded with cuteness, but I fail to see exactly what it is about. It's a fake burial with everyone attending being in on it? It’s a nice slice of life, but it’s fairly fluffy at then end. Nothing much happens, and I agree with the other commenters here that you should give us more details about what's happening rather than wasting words explaining us things we should already know about special agent SD.

Reads like a good soufflé.

While I agree with TD that the title was a good one, I was not that impressed by the story. The idea of changelings filling in for BonBon while she's away on mission to keep the pretence up is fine, but that doesn’t explain why there are so many of them: one would’ve been sufficient. As such, though I see what you’re aiming for, it seems you deliberately amped up the plot to get a more dramatic effect, but in the end you’re somehow hoist by your own petard: it feels artificial.

Beyond this, there’s nothing significant I can offer you: I think the core concept is fair, though it’s not really the first time I encounter this sort of plot, but the way you developed it let me somewhat down.

A few typos (like embed instead of ‘embedded’). I had a hard time with “I was playing with the clothesline with gummy and it popped clean of”: at first, I thought I was missing something. Then I finally reckoned the final ‘it’ refers to the leg, which is not really that obvious at first glance (straight-up I was wondering how a clothesline can pop clean). Two ‘particularly’ in a short space, also. And Pinikie with an extraneous ‘i’ that was fun.

This was a bit silly, the kind of absurd humour some might like. I am on the fence here. The idea was crazy and fun, but I am not sold on the way you exploited it. The Pinkie’s bit, which others happened to like, felt a downer to me. Although we’ve seen Pinkie doing fun things or getting herself into weird shapes, the idea of her leg just popping off as if she was a doll doesn’t really fit my headcanon. You’ve souped up the absurdity to the point it broke my immersion and I was like kicked out of the story. Also, I don’t really understand what justifies Rarity’s final U-turn.

Well. That’s my fifth story and I’m wondering if I don’t begin to really drift away from the show and become out-of-touch.

I feel I’ve already read that before. I wouldn’t say the concept is stale, but I’m really convinced I already stumbled on the same story or so. I’m not accusing you of cribbing, but it’s just to explain why I was let down whereas others might find the story fine.

There are some little bumps, like this sentence which dangles and is not attributed to anypony. And some ‘saidisms’: stated confidently. Why confidently? Fluttershy offered quietly. Same thing. Sounds weird.

I have not much to say on the story itself. Fairly linear and unsurprising, at least to me. Not bad, but lacks spice. Just a bonus for the pun in the title, which I suppose not many will get.

Okay. I’m not sold by this one, but I haven’t been sold by any story I read so far, so don’t feel bad.

Your Twilight sounds really much more like a CMC doing some sort of silly experiment. The twist at the end is only suggested: what does really happen when she shouts Eureka? And then your needles stop, but where do they stop exactly? They zero?

All in all, too jejune for Twilight, and too unrealistic to really strike me.